Love me

I would really appreciate some feedback, on whats good here or how I can improve.

New Beeme
Hi1'
Very good all of it.
love can be used in
so many ways, we want it to be said
when it's not we wonder why.then
if they don't say always believe
things gone wrong, not treated
way we should be.Do you agree.
children say get what they want sometimes.
Where back on our feet again.
Hope your well and
everything is
going ok for you.
julie x

Thanks Julie, yeah your right :)Thats very true, everything is great thankyou cept alot of work. x

Hi,
Love you, love your poems. I'd drop a couple of redundant words from the first stanza,

I whisper “please love me”
you turn around look at me but
don't hear

What do you think?

Nick

Thankyou so much for the compliment Nick, I agree about the first stanza.

Not much to it, but keep on trying! &&

new Beeme
Wow! well done on the cherry!
so pleased.
julie x

thankyou so much Julie and Nolan, thankyou for the cherry abctales! x

So sad. I think every one of us felt like this one time. A big well done!

Nathan xox

Thanks Nathan x

Murder him

nice poem alonso

Thankyou alonso.

Beeme xx

LOL Nolan, he doesn't need taking care of. He is a valuable writing aid, if nothing else.

Beeme

Hell I hope so!
Take care &&

;)

Beeme xx

Sweetheart!

Agreed

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