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A Triolet Of Woe ( For The I. P.)

Posted by Bradene on November 27, 2010 - 10:22
from the ABC set Life's Ups And Downs

I am full of words unspoken
My head will burst if I don’t speak
No words will fall upon the page.
I am full of words unspoken
My mind is addled due to age
spirits shortly will be broken
I am full of words unspoken
My head will burst if I don’t speak.

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Comments

Silver Spun Sand | November 27, 2010 - 16:38

A clever one, indeed, Val!!

I know just how you feel;-)

Tina x

Bradene | November 27, 2010 - 16:43

I like these little triolets I find they can be amusing and fun to do. Thanks for reading Tina. Valx

SundaysChild | November 27, 2010 - 19:54

Very good

Bradene | November 27, 2010 - 20:03

Thankyou SC. Val

tcook | November 29, 2010 - 15:43

I like this too but the 'soon' in the third to last line seems to grate. Try reading it out loud and I think you'll agree.

Bradene | November 29, 2010 - 16:32

Yes I see what you mean perhaps I'll try to replace it with something else. Thanks Tony. Val

Cavalcaderl | November 29, 2010 - 22:02

new Bradene
Liked this,well deserved cherry!
How did you guess? I am like that.
julie xx

Bradene | November 30, 2010 - 12:27

I think this is a mood shared by writers the world over, it's what makes us tick. Thanks for reading Julie. Valx