Oh little flake of purest white
How soft you glide from heavens height
To rest upon the frosty land
And touch the world with icy hands
Oh with your brethren cold and crisp
The barest sight, the slightest wisp
Cascading through the wintry sky
‘Til at my feet you gently lie
Oh tiny snowflake, natures lace
How soft you fall upon my face
Leave diamond traces on my skin
Before you vanish with your kin.
Comments
Nolan | March 21, 2010 - 20:26
Beautiful! It leaves you with a sense of wonder..
kheldar | March 21, 2010 - 21:05
As gentle as the snowflake you describe, and just as beautiful
kheldar :--)
cassiopeia | March 21, 2010 - 21:54
wow thanks everyone, to deem it good enough to read to your children is an amazing compliment. xx
RachelPatricia | March 30, 2010 - 10:26
I love this it is so beautifully sweet! I'm going to read this to my children they'll love it xx
RachelPatricia | March 30, 2010 - 10:29
Just realised I'd made a typo - didn't realise it'd put my comment to the bottom though! Still getting used to things on here,
You're very welcome for your comments, Cassiopeia, and yes, my children did love it, my daughter said it is 'very very pretty' and it inspired her to start writing her own little poem so thank you very much for that :)
Rachel xx
Nolan | March 31, 2010 - 10:13
Hello again Cassiopeia! Your rhyme works out beautifully save in the first verse. I want to suggest: "To rest upon frosty lands".
Cheers keep well! &&
kheldar | March 31, 2010 - 15:32
Hmmmm, Nolan. You raise an interesting point, a lot of poetry seems to allow the rhyming of singulars with plurals, you seem not to be ageeable to this.
Kheldar
Nolan | March 31, 2010 - 16:20
No man it's the sounds I'm trying to rhyme.
cassiopeia | May 24, 2010 - 17:07
I take your point but as it's about a single snowflake I feel land works better even tho lands rhymes better if you get me :)
But all feedback appreciated xx