"CROCODILE TEARS" Did You Know (True.)

Hi Julie, you've got this as a story and not a poem.

I liked this julie, i would suggest maybe splitting it into two poems, Part 1 and Part 2. Perhaps finish part one after the stanza

"It cries crocodile tears
Not sure if true!
When!
There is so much one can do."

Start part 2 like this:

"A water drought
He lays there
lifeless!
Are we like that!
In the sun get burn't up
Put our sun- cream and glasses on
and lay for hours
maybe it should wear to

Do watch the sun
It will frizzle you like
A sausage too!"

Then the rest.

It is entirely up to you of course, i hope you don't mind the suggestion.

David xx :--)

Can it hibernate like this during a drought? The crocodile I mean. Doubt it. I know frogs (other amphibians?) can and some fish- barber definitely. Deeply buried in the mud ‘till it rains again. (You can't tell me anything about crocodile tears).

cheers julie!

Hi Julie,

Don't worry about hitting wrong key, I suspect we've all done it (I know I have). I suspect some folks may concentrate on poems more than stories so i didn't want anybody to miss this one. If its any good to you both me and the wife forgot about the clocks going forward, just as well we didn't have to be anywhere at a set time.

David xx :--)

'Until rain and water comes
one big green eye
will rotate
and the scales

on his back each one
opens! like ventilators
and little mirrors
as the crocodiles blood flows

and air comes in
Quivers! and shivers!
till the peep of the sun
as it get's warmer'

- love these lines, Julie! The poem reminds me of a visit to a zoo in Australia when I went a few years ago and there was one huge crocodile basking in the sun! Well done on this one,much enjoyed ;)

Magic xxx

Hi there, Julie. Sorry you are having a bad week.

A good poem, this one, but I have to say that I agree with David about splitting it in two. It would work well if you split it where he suggests.

"I fell asleep on the beach
when young
Looked like
A red tomato!"

I could identify very much with these lines. I did that once...and I was on my honeymoon and not only that, but my new husband did too! It was on our first day in the Isle of Wight. Not the smartest thing to do on one's honeymoon...but we made up for lost time when we got home;-)

Tina xx

new Tina
Hi! tried again,with yours
and "Kheldars" kind ideas and help.
What do you think now.
julie xx

Strangely enough, Julie, ours was a B & B too...in Shanklin, called Rylstone House. Small world, isn't it?

And they were more than crocodile tears we shed that honeymoon;-)

Tina xx

new Silver-spun-sand
Have a good easter.(Egg) extra special.
julie xx

new Nolan
Thankyou Nolan kind comment.
It was a historical programme
on TV brilliantly done! Ihought try out as a poem. believe Crocodile was in a cave.So
Always willing to hear and learn.
Tell me more.So interesting instead of blood,and gory things.One learns.
julie x

New MistakenMagic
Thankyou Oh! gee,truth is
It was a tv programme so interesting
when it finished I forgot it.So tried make
a poem out of it finger's slipped on key's
good !Kheldar" spotted it not story,meant to
basically rhyme,"Kheldar" gave help and advice
alter I am comparing copy of mine,so can see it
and his,is very good version.Have asked Silver-spun-sand for help,anyone can add correct or do one.
dictionary said,The eye rotates and crocodile weeps
when it devours it's victims, don't know.
What a week,"Wheelie Bin" run away,and I fell over tree stumps going with daughter to see "Abba Gold" O.
Hence "Stumped an not out" I think it was.
Was it a big zoo Australia,our friend's over back
moved to Perth.Near here! I was amazed when mine,set
my blog up,year so ago,email through in seconds.Australia.
julie have a good Easter
What's difference in Crocodile and Alligator worth it.Hope all is well.Have a good easter.Gale blowing.
julie xx many thanks

new Silver-spun-sand
Hi! thankyou so much,it 3was meant to be a poetic kind of poem.Hit key story.Well reading copies Rays
done,so I can look back to your's and kheldar.As do comment and loose it,try.I appreciate help as asked,thankyou.Here!goes.All suggestions great.xx
Poor you honeymoon shame.Painful isn't it.
Hope you did make up time.
We went Shanklin years ago B/B.No never had honeymoon then.Annimation for best films on last night great.The animals,Elton "John's Circle Of Life" 10 films.Think was "The Bare Necessities " won.
Dictionary says,crocodile, it allures it's victims by devouring weeps? crocodile tears,so do I re-do that bit. See what you all think.Now taken advice,thanks.re-done.If I think to quick,mistakes come.
have a eggs tra special Easter
julie xx
julie xx

new kheldar
Hi! David taken your's and
Tinas' advice,no open to all suggestions,but have to re=set i,and make sure not left old previous stanza in so deleted. what! do you think of it now
both many thanks expert advise correction.
Prepared to alter more,if think.It was mean't to be kind of funny true Poem.Very greatful.
Many thanks
have egg tra special Easter
julie xx.

Hi Julie, I really apologise if I'm confusing things for you, I envisaged two seperate poems, sort of like this:

CROCODILE TEARS - PART 1

A water drought
He lays there
lifeless!

It's eyes are closed
you would think in a doze
Elongated body
absolutely still

Until rain and water comes
one big green eye
will rotate
and the scales

on his back each one
opens! like ventilators
and little mirrors
as the crocodiles blood flows

and air comes in
Quivers! and shivers!
till the peep of the sun
as it get's warmer

He gradually
begins to alter
His strength had gone
and energy too

Suddenly!
The little legs
one by one
Like a sloth! will move

A heavy body learning to breathe
It is so thankful!
For the water and rain
Sun and moon

I have cried! so many crocodile
tears in my life!
It states in dictionary
when it devours

Its' victims to
allure them
Sheds crocodile tears

And the children have no water!
In countries to drink!
and sanitation
that is very sad to

It cries crocodile tears
Not sure if true!
When!
There is so much one can do."

CROCODILE TEARS - PART 2

A water drought
He lays there
lifeless!

Are we like that!
In the sun get burn't up
Put our sun- cream and glasses on
and lay for hours
maybe it should wear to

Do watch the sun
It will frizzle you like
A sausage too

I fell asleep on the beach
when young
Looked like
A red tomato!"

Luckily a friend
took me home
and my brother's
and sister to

Taken home by car
Do we ever learn!
The bed sheets could hardly bare
Now we know what a Crocodile
goes through

Just a little bit
of the sun is good
A fair skin burns quickly

One can not master the sea
never go out to deep!
The lungs are for breathing
and the bodies to move.

Hey Julie, sorry I'm late commenting. I really enjoyed your poem, especially these lines;

"A heavy body learning to breathe
It is so thankful!
For the water and rain
Sun and moon

I have cried! so many crocodile
tears in my life!
It states in dictionary
when it devours

Its' victims to
allure them
Sheds crocodile tears"

And fortunately for me I rarely burn, I just tan in the sun :-)

Beeme xx

I just stay in the shade

new Nolan
Oh! I see,why.
have a good Easter
julie x

new Beeme
Hello! thankyou misundertood
Kheldar,as I pressed story not poem.
Hence his very kind help,I will now re-alter
into 2 parts as he has done,take a while re-do.Then let me know what you think.Should be better.Word should be weep's,not sheds.Glad you like tv programme
so thought try put into poem.Work man here to-morrow
toilet,and wall hectic time finding things.Wrap up warm.Rough out to-day.
Your good poet make one up too.He still resting his back?
julie xx

Hi Julie, it is a wonderful compliment that you allowed me to discuss these ideas with you. You keep on writing from the mind, and the heart, you're stuff is always a breth of fresh air.

Yours in awe,

David xx

new kheldar
No! sharing and bit of help,helps me.
It is now I realise late in life and able
to,ideas and discussion of all,may help someone
else.I take some Silver-spun-sand try. copy bits and punctuation.But topic of life! interesting aren't
they.But I don't always see things like others do.
I don't mind if anyone copies anything if it is
any kind of help to them.Now I find things,repeat
Titles ideas,suppose they will.Names in Horses.News.
Wow! what a compliment thankyou.Still not read all of your story yet,brilliant.Workman here bit to-day,so young wall coating,mine he is moving bit better.The Bill is finishing Autumn so sad,Chris Ellison he came to day
centre and homeless once,and onto Odeon last year,host presenting plastic oscars,wow!all of us and certificates,age 16-
80 age,dancing,singing,acting,poetry.handed out.Photos put all on and writing group,large screen and we watched,That's enough from me.
So much is closing down shame."Borders" our main Book shop,and coffee lounge.I have still left my poem
from you to me kindly done!on Ray got me copy and change like yours.Any time discussions good.
Have a good Easter Bitter wind out!
Thankyou David
julie xx

Hi Julie,

Really, really like this! Your poems are always so refreshing. Going to read more now, just never seem to have enough time to read as much as I want to!

Rachel xx

How on earth did you manage to get sunburnt like that? I thought you live in the vicinity of the North-Pole?

Yeah it's great news for Tony, Julie. The arrival of a new baby just in time for spring is such a blessing for them :)

I'm loving the start of the new season; I've got two sunflowers starting to grow on the kitchen window ledge that my children brought home from shool, and daffodils in an empty bottle on there too, I love it :)

Have a good weekend too, Happy Easter,

Rachel xx

new Nolan
because fair skin,only very young with my brother's and sister on beach,and fell asleep while they were playing friend's children.Didn't cover shoulders and legs.
whoops.
julie

new Penandpaperdreams
Lovely title name
Just seen this oh! it's nice
your children do sweet things,
daffodils and Sunflowers unusual from school isn't it.I think when mine was samll,we used put her Hyacinth bulbs in dark cupbaord,Ugh!from school
and she got certificates couple years,dark made them bloom.Her and work pal do our gardens small.As can't
bend low,once fall in road bike. daffs;out Lupins,and Tulips.Last year,lovely.
Wind knocks them over,or maybe lost "Wheelie Bin".
joke.Well when she was babe,one of cards every part of baby was in poetry beautiful.Like a volume card.
Not looked for it,if I have.Could typed it for Tony
new grandaughter.I tried one here on ours My "Dear Lorraine" as a naughty little girl,one day scribbled
it,used much much later in life! and on here,not poetic.Work men finishing.leak above,so stop caps had to go on extra,got worse not ours.New toilet but
higher plythns spelt it wrong, wood.Now to high us.
High winds,especially market hunting,onto open spaces
no shops.bus no good for me.Brigjhton Fringe Festival coming up.A lovely now re-painted bandstand
and walk,hope along prom.I used take my brothers and sister on train small to Bramber,we pick primroses.
Those were the days,see museum cat's made,for weddings all designed,cause stuffed,no sure if liked at first as a child.Have a good week-end.
julie x

New Kheldar
Hi David like comments and advice,
as re-done,poem now (IP)
"7 Minutes Of Pop's Life"
As Editor read to,said jumbled true,
be worth re-doing and worth while,again and again.
sO have one comment likes it as it was.As after MistakenMagic nice comment,I carried on past and present out of order and skills and when he died,out o order.Now ne version,beginning,middle,and end.
And good poets,can say and tell me what think and ideas.Now added Title "Sands Of Time".
I was up very late re-changing, it,some from my
"Mangled Mess Of Life's Experiences".bits in bits left out.So need all experts.
daughter and hubby never flwe to Spain cos.the volcano burst and flights cancelled.etc;might go Sat;
so under great pressure,not knowing all messages if any.or not told,none.Mobiles?
Hope your well.
Have a good week-end
julie xx

Part I is beautifully descriptive:

“It's eyes are closed
you would think in a doze
Elongated body
absolutely still
one big green eye
will rotate
and the scales
on his back each one
opens! like ventilators
and little mirrors

and air comes in
Quivers! and shivers!
till the peep of the sun
He gradually
begins to alter
His strength had gone
and energy too
Suddenly!
The little legs
one by one
Like a sloth! will move”

Good! Makes one think of a space-craft preparing for take-off. You know like those good old SF movies: Battlestar Galactica, Star-Wars, Moonbase Alpha…

All you need still are the sound-effects.

(What has become of our faith? Finding now every and any reason why a thing must be impossible, instead of dreaming? May-be, how, maybe? Dreams instead of doubt…

Nolan &&

“A pessimist is a man who sees the sun set in the East.”

(When are you doing the green-eyed thing again?

New Nolan
Thankyou comments and typing
some of it,I wasn't doing it again.Re;Green Eye.
Is that what you mean.I asked help and ideas,and Kheldar,David did so,and suggestions I took his way
and advice.So pleased I let him help me.But I pressed
the wrong button and put it as a story,it was poem.
As I mentioned it was t.v. programme so,interesting
I watched crocodile laying there.Though I will try poem on it, but most came re-adjusted by Kheldar David.Or some ideas and a word here there.
Yep! I remeber "Star Wars" great."Star Trek"
and quite a few more.Hubby always watches them.
Did you want me to do green eye again then.
Or what idea had you.Oh! "The Clangers" were good
looked like little mice.
managed answer to-night for you.You missed line or two,of poem and 2nd half.Did you mean to.
julie x

Pinky and the Brain? Go for it!

And yes I skipped some lines &&

Nolan
Oh! I thought so,did you want me to change it then?
Who is Pinky=Pig
and the brains of who.
Re-Grren Eye,I see "
strangely enough DVD out to-morow
"Avatar" has big Green Eye".
But re-minds me of,Cyclops,
the Greek giant with the one eye,
story in the middle of the forehead.
I hated picture scary.When small.
Which also related to "Crocodile Tears"
both eyes closed and gradually rate my word,
Cat's eye's too go slanted and open.
What topic do you want,or I will try a poem.
Thanks.
julie

Calcabaderl : Green eyes

6 : 4

-Nolan deleted as computer done it three times.
julie

.

.

new David I am still thinking?
just gone on,computer workmen here doing toilet and wall.Up till 1.am
commenting lost it on comment here all did. Continue later.What a week mishaps.I am thinking may need my ending of this cut out.
What do you say.
Submit later.OK.
Many thanks like your version.
Must read your good poetic
ones and stories great.
julie x

.Nolan
What do you mean,comment
6: 4 green eyes.
Are youe talking of "Green Eyes"
the cat poem.
Or green eye of the Crocodile tears.
What is a pinky brains.
Please explain.
thankyou.
julie it's cavalcader L is a mistake.
Comes from Noel Coward's play Cavalcader
my mum and I in 1995 she asked me to go with
her and we got in as extras.Theatre Royal great
all the celebs;and people and children we met.
Hard work. Jeremy Clyde and Gabriel Drake etc.
I stood and chatted next to me,before going on.
Big head! me what an experience.
That's enough from me.
Yes, I have found it your comment,on "Green Eyes"
my cat poem.
Thanks,maybe could explain in more detail,if you
wouldn't mind.
julie x cavalcader

New penandpaperdreams
Hi! glad you liked it Rachael,
experiment,asked all help,re-tv.
programme so interesting,so sat to
and tried to put into poem,Kheldar
kindly re-set and helped,so now on twice,
makes more sense stanzas altered now,
positions.But as we have a copier now,
he ran it off,then I sat and altered it.
I love the solar system to.No I don't get
round to reading them as well,hectic wormen
coming before Easter,and mine his back went ugh!
Ironing tired off to bed.
Have a good wee end.Exciting Tony got to be grandad.
Baby girl.
The 2 young lads came, one is waiting.to be a dad the end of month.One had 8 year old,and baby of 2 half years,lot to do,them and working here so hard.
Have a good Easter.The wind cuts through one.
julie must read yours and all.xx

-Nolan
Computer sluggish,copied 3 times same,so deleted.
julie

Penandpaperdreams
Sorry,computer's sluggish,like me
repeats comment twice,three times
Nolan,so have to see and delete.
Yep;I must do a proof before hand
as someone says,kindly.Before posting
it on here! and cut down length of them.
julie

new Kheldar
This is racing up the charts readings,
since your alterations and kind suggestions,
I know hwat I mean,but can't always put it in the
right context and stanzas.Must do proof before,as
someone's suggested.Work at them and shorten aye!
Thanks most of credit goes to you,your expert way
of doing it.David.
julie x

Dear old calcabaderl $ Of Mice and Men $

Featuring *Pinkybrain and the WeeWeely*
“What’s up doc?”, “Nothing much”

THE PLOT: I have to be brutally honest, “The plan that went astray.”

new Nolan
Thank's think.mine said
comes from "RicHARD tHE 3rd.
Don't know much about?
"The Clanger's used to whistle
not talk,good.No feel free,cooment
but if I can't grasp it.Or agree.
Don't worry.It may have been bad,day for me?
I am sure many on here! will also write,if
you want answewrs ask.Like some mine,now
I have commented to long,like an Agony Aunt.Me.
Enjoy it all though,questions,ideas similiar situations.Experiences of lives.It's just I didn't
quite understand last few rhymes of lines you put.OK.
so if happens on anything,I don't reply to all,of some,or ask explain.
Thanks
julie (x) cavalcader (:-

julie

new kheldar
Hi! David
Thankyou so much your's a great!I will try your
way,bit confusing put it into correct
stanzas,will do it should be weep's not sheds.
But yours are great,I started one of your stories,
so exciting,but had go out Easter shopping gales.
Plasterer here!only young,doing wall bit black and toilet.Job to find anything.
Thankyou all your help.Here goes?
Kheldar you have kindly put,1st stanza at beg;part one. I agrree stands out more you clever one.Good readings,Higher and Higher!tahnk's to you and Silver-spun-sand,Mistakenmagic and Beeme all bit,can't do all punctuation if altered too much though.Brill:now
Ray is waiting use his computer.Bye for now.
and also part 2 is that needed or is it to make it stand out.Will do to-morrow.Many thanks.Mine come from the mind,not studied poetry,Thankyou all help
This is causing quite a stir!
Thank's to you re-organising it,and all help suggestions.Because your's are expertly done!
And I read.Something you have.I must make a proof first someone suggested,good idea.
Readings,high and replies 44 wow!
But I amaze myself what I now can try!
Joke I don't want "Crocodile (Tears")
to catch "The Crocodile)?
Joke
up "Green Eyes")my special Cat poem.
julie xx x cavalcader (:-

If a person declares, "I have to be brutally honest" it usually means "I shall now lie straight faced through my teeth." If a guy says "with all respect" it usually means exactly the opposite. It is, just, so.

The story of pinkybrain was sucked from my thumb, it has no meaning (unless maybe, someone thinks it does, and in that case, it probably has!) It's love that makes the world go 'round- Satchmo.

Cheers Madame Calcabaderl! &&

(I've now got a green eyes of my own! Just made himself at home, just like that. Black cat & green-eyes. Dunno if the name is "Jazz” he ignores me. I think he’ll weed out the mice.)

New Nolan
Well done!on the cat,sure your make
it very happy,talk to it,and stroke.
Listen to it purr!What are you calling it.
Yes,good mousers that the word.Umm! "Green Eyes"
Let me know what you name it,and how it goes.
Ball of silver paper on a string play.Your right definitely love,makes the world go round,different ways.I am no madam.thanks.
julie x

I think it’s a tomcat

new Nolan
Let em know what it's like colour,and a name.
julie

Will do. When I see him again... As I said, a rover &&

Dear old Calcabaderl

He’s back! Probably ‘cause it’s so cold and rainy. When I went out to the veranda today there he was curled up in my favourite chair on the pillow. Now I have to sit on a plastic garden chair. He’s bit neglected I don’t think he’s got a home. Jett black. Eyes clear cruel green. Some scars I think he’s a fighter. Stroke him he doesn’t purr in fact he tried to bite me. Just twitches his tail like he’s stalking a bird or what Bit on the wild side.

A cat chooses it’s owner not other way round. This one looks like he’s seriously jealous. He’s very lazy. He’s lovely. His name is “Rover”.

Regards
Nolan

PS. Can you tell me, how does a cat know where it’s home is?

new Nolan
So glad cat Rover is back!
At first I thought you had bought one,my
mistake.Tom's canbew spiteful.But could been
illtreated.Rover's a good name then for him.
Did you have some fish,or chicken,would have
smelt and come back.Watch that bite,daughter's
three cat's,now ginger one odd ways,know fact
I hear.Tap a saucer and Rover come back.
Well I think it's a smell or scent they remember.
Pop died,his lady friend too it, Tom lived near sea-front.But it was found in dad's garden,but one had
previously been buried there in those days.I think width od cat's whiskers tell them how wide a gap is
get through.Maybe he took to you or liked warmth of
the chair.Most like bird's and frogs,anything that moves,the Tom's.Ginger fragile when little,we had two
ne ginger one,chase it under the bed,and take limps of fur out of it.Jealous oh yes.
chilly out popped into artists open day,very interesting for me,yesterday.Quite a fae ginger cat's,look at you from a place near,dart under plastic gardening bags,or brown paper,very timid.
julie

Shadow. That is the name of my cruel-green eyed cat &&

new Nolan
Well a very nice name!
I remember song, "Me and My Shadow".
Before your time.Thank's sharing his name.
You can make a good poem up on "Shadow.
"Green Eyed" well you don;t know his background,
much do you.Keep loving him,put on some gloves
protection.
julie x

Shadow is missing. Four days now. Hope not something dreadful he wasn’t run over or kidnapped. Maybe he comes back again.

new Nolan
A "Shadow" follows one, remember never goes away.
So keep hoping, tempt,bit of food on a saucer.Or chink1 a dish and call it's name.Don't forget something made him come to you.They can dig claws
in one,if sit on your lap,happy.Or stare at you,most
of time come to you.Cat fight here!sometimes.bit like
children or people,like to try to be best,get there
own ways, in things.Dominatate. differences.Does "Shadow" wear a collar,maybe he liked "Rover." I am sure he will come back.
julie x

Dear Mz Calcabaderl. Shadow came back! Maybe it’s because the weather’s cleared up- sunshine you see. But he came back Monday night. So he is a Moonshadow. He wags his tail like a dog when you stroke him. I think he’s a bit wild. Is it so? That one can feed cats with chicken and fish? I thought they ate only cat pellets. Must it be cooked? Would like to give him a live mouse.

My Shadow has the most deadly green eyes.
Nolan

PS. Jerry next door’s been a nuisance I had to move He discovered a remote re-set for my PC. Long-distance hardboot. The reason I’ve been quiet. Other than that I’m quite happy here.

new Nolan
Glad Shadow has returned.Well
always cook chicken first,and fish.
But a tin of cat food,try.Say no to
milk,we always as children gave our's milk.
and my belated Mum, to said butter on the paws
stopped them running away.Not aure about that.
Weathe is getting warmer.I hope.Maybe get up market
to-morrow.Why not buy "Shadow", a name tag.
Have a good week-end
julie cavalcader.

He has a name. Thanks you too!

Mrs Calcabaderl, You can't put a collar on a cat surely? He'll scratch his neck bald and he'll scratch the skin raw. It can't work. Maybe if you started out with a kitten. Have to come up with another plan.
Have a great week!
Nolan

Nolan
Hi.most have a flea collar on.
I haven't got a cat we haven't of our own.
But brought up with them,
I don't think it matters on age of cat.
HoW's "Shadow".
Julie x

new Kheldar
Thankyou David for reading;
1st my mistake it's meant to
be as a poem,difficult.It was
a programme on tv most interesting
instead of blood and gory things.
I do like the way you have suggested
But he has taken copy of mine,so I
can compare and read properly of course
yours reads better,as I can't do these
things sometimes,I ask for help and from
(Tony) Editor Abctales has helped IP I did
And punctuation can't do..
But as always all sugestions received with
greatfullness and love, from all Authors.I am Watching tv.
Forgot put clock on so behind.Daughter came.
As had go out.
You will see the change now,at the moment he has the .tv on? Difficult to concentrate!
Thankyou so much for any help gives me more ideas to.
I love reading yours.And the way you have put reads better.But it is mean't to be poem hit wrong key?
What do you think.
julie x