I looked at her, she looked at Jane
we played the swing park games again.
I went there every single day
and hoped the mothers would pass my way.
I used to have a proper place -
until the cameras caught my face -
now I live in another town,
and sit in parks 'til the sun goes down.
Sometimes I take photographs
I like it if the little girls laugh.
See me waiting on my park bench,
mums turn away from imagined stench.
I liked Spielberg's film of the List,
and right at the end was truly bliss:
I loved the splash of bright carmine;
today a red dress would do me fine.
I'll move on, when the register's read,
best to do it, or end up dead.
I know there's always the internet,
but nothing beats the real thing yet.
Comments
lenchenelf | April 28, 2009 - 08:54
Very Dark Stuff and original take on the comp, once again, you pay careful attention to the narrative voice atb Lena
Silver Spun Sand | April 28, 2009 - 11:29
Very dark indeed, and very effective.
Tina
chuck | April 28, 2009 - 12:58
We get all kinds on ABCtales :)
chuck | April 28, 2009 - 17:02
That's what happens when the competition is open to everyone.
Dynamaso | April 29, 2009 - 06:18
Yes, dark and twisted but very good too. I like it a lot.
Ewan | April 29, 2009 - 06:38
Very droll, Chuck!
Voice poems are what I really enjoy writing most, even (especially?)if the character is unlike my own. However, I haven't dared adopt a female voice so far; when -and if- I do, I expect it will be someone distinctive, possibly even famous.
alessandro | May 16, 2009 - 08:05
Nothing wrong with writing about things like this.
That is the beauty of literature, to be able to address issues that we're afraid of.
I'm constructing something similar...
jennifer | May 18, 2009 - 19:54
Very creepy, really well done. Made me shudder!
J x
threeleafshamrock | May 21, 2009 - 13:14
Pervectly acceptable ;) Very well conveyed and indeed creepy.
Chris