Rational Proof?


from the ABC set Poems For Cyril

Tick, tock, tick, tock: ignore the workings of the clock,
as if a repeater on a chain, is proof and positive evidence plain
the watchmaker exists in the here and now,
as well use the bullock as proof of the plough.
Not so, not so: what we sense is what we know:
the fortunate chance of intellect,
deserves at least a little respect
- if not then we are faith's holiest fools,
mesmerised by solipsistical schools.
And when we meet them, our fellow fortunate sapients
in the long beyond, shaped by rare and random events
as mysterious to us, as ours must surely seem to them,
will a polished pebble hold the value of the brightest gem?

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Comments

lenchenelf | November 21, 2009 - 11:57

Significance? Ah that's secret squirrel stuff. Enjoyed :-D atb Lenax

h jenkins | November 23, 2009 - 22:01

There's some wonderful cosmic questions in there - particularly the last line which I like a great deal.

I wonder though, if you don't mind the suggestion, whether it wouldn't be better to split it into three stanzas. The rhythms of the three parts are quite different and it makes it easier for the reader if you indicate that. You've separated them, in effect, with full stops but they can be missed in a casual read. Why not make it even clearer and structure it 4-5-4?

Just an idea.

Helvigo Jenkins