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Posted by Firebird on October 30, 2009 - 10:36
from the ABC set Dust

I watch you
Open your heart
I hold you
In suspense
We part
And lines draw across a blank page
I call to you
Open your soul
Feel me
Fall
Watch me
Rewind
Recoil and spoil
A future drained
of need and greed and lover's lament
Watch me
Crawl
Before you
I stand
A shadow
Split by fire
Soulful spirit of desire
Watch me
For I know not what I do
I once was whole in my solitude
But broken now
I watch for you.

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Comments

Beeme | October 30, 2009 - 18:22

A quite sad, however a very beautiful poem. I really enjoyed.

Loved these lines;
'A shadow
Split by fire
Soulful spirit of desire'

Beeme xx

Yazmin | October 31, 2009 - 11:51

I agree, its so sweet.
As i finished reading it I said "AWW" Ha.
Good Job
Yaz

Firebird | November 1, 2009 - 13:25

Thanks :)

MistakenMagic | November 1, 2009 - 13:40

'We part
And lines draw across a blank page'

- really love these lines and really interesting structure!

Magic xxx

Firebird | November 1, 2009 - 15:11

Thank you Magic:)

Really appreciate your feedback.

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