Condemned


from the ABC set Poetry

Something moves and something turns
and you will learn the shape of it.
It grows out of the near darkness
and out from the sounds of fear
crawling through these dead streets.

You turn to see, but all there is
are concrete black shadows looming,
and the ringing echo of footsteps.

In your mind, your blood flows
like rain down gutters into drains
and you are left, bare and empty
as one of these gutted buildings
that wait, indifferent and condemned.

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Comments

QueenElf | January 19, 2009 - 16:35

I found this strangely haunting.

tamara (not verified) | January 19, 2009 - 18:40

Yes,me too but absolutely spell-bounding stuff.

jennifer | January 20, 2009 - 13:08

The first two lines are extremely powerful,

'Something moves and something turns
and you will learn the shape of it.'

Stunning, in fact. However, I was then disappointed, for although I think the poem is good, the rest of it paled in comparison to that phenomenal start...

A re-write?!

J x