The surface of rippling river is like a seamless sheet of hammered silver, perfectly reflecting the dome of the sky in fluid shining metal. As time passes a shining embellishment of gold spreads slowly across the cool watery surface, as the setting sun casts a rosy glow over the sky above. The stillness of the scene feels precisely and tensely balanced, the pen poised in the author’s hand: the river is framed by identical black lines formed by the bases of the rushes, silent worshippers whispering in the lightest of breezes, while a black headed gull draws a graphite line straight down above the centre of the water; a prism balanced on the minutest details. Ripples spread from tiny bubbles forming here and there, so that it appears to be raining from the clouds immortalised under the surface.
A wind is coming. The golden reflections sink and vanish before the current spills over the burnished silver, and the river reclaims its own treasures.
Comments
shoe | December 5, 2009 - 10:44
nice images, I like it, not sure if it is poetry though, maybe prose?
hekamede | December 5, 2009 - 11:55
thank you, yes I wasn't really sure what it was, more of a bit of descriptive writing like we did for GCSE English - I've changed it to 'other' now :)
littleditty | December 27, 2009 - 13:28
nice descriptives, you write well. The colours and imagery of Nature naturally hold symbols for the reader, which give the writing depth and meanings - this is good descriptive style for a longer piece which also has more plot to it. Or for poetry. What you have here is called poetic prose! Or perhaps flash fiction. I like it. I'll look out for your posts.
hekamede | December 28, 2009 - 15:58
thank you very much, I was so glad to hear what you say about depth, that's what I love exploring in writing! In the future I do hope to have a go at writing more at length - but the demands of uni coupled with my slow writing pace have somewhat hindered me so far!!