Looking down, she knew the work she had to do but stopped long enough to enjoy the moment. She stroked the rounded face. The skin was cool and smooth. She traced her forefinger around each eye, tenderly touching the delicate flesh. The gently curved mouth was closed now. She wondered what it might say if it had the chance and laughed softly to herself. She picked up the knife and touched a fingertip to its edge, smiling at the sharpness.
She pressed the knife against the flesh. Holding her breath for a moment, she pierced the skin with the tip. She was surprised how little liquid seeped out from the first cut. Emboldened, she pushed the blade in further, a silky smooth movement with nothing to hinder it. Then the madness was upon her. She plunged the blade in again and again, thrilling to the sensation. Her hair flew around, tickling her face but she didn’t notice. When sanity came back to her she eyed her handy work. Messy but good, she thought. Only the last stomach churning job to do and then she could rest.
Placing the knife on the table she gently pushed her hand into the open wound. She cringed at the revolting, wet sensation that travelled from her hand up her arm. Well it had to be done! Steadying herself, she took a deep breath and removed her hand. This was nauseating but it would soon start to smell if the innards were not removed properly. Looking at the slimy wet mess in her hand she felt slightly sick but had to carry on.
In only a few short minutes her work was complete. Looking around her she could see she had made more of a mess than last time! Even the walls were splattered with the sticky mess. The whole thing was rather gruesome but she was pleased with the work she had done, even if there were thin tendrils of slimy soft tissue over her face and in her hair. She would deal with them later she thought, wiping her cheek in an absent minded way.
She looked up, startled when the doorbell rang. Even amid the chaos she knew she had to answer it. Hurrying to the front door, anticipation gripped her. She threw the door open. The air was so cold outside that it stung her face after the heat of her exertion. She thrust the creation she had worked so hard on towards them, delighted at the stunned faces that greeted her. Her jack-o'-lantern was perfect. The local children always loved to visit her at this time of year. They shrieked with pleasure. “Trick or Treat!”

Comments
Larkin Williamson | October 28, 2009 - 17:14
You got me...this was cool...thanks! :)
Scout | November 6, 2009 - 20:49
Haha, didn't see that one coming, was sure it was a serial killer or surgeon doing an autopsy or something... Watch out for the odd cliche such as 'silky smooth', 'stomache churning' etc, apart from those I thought it was a compact and nicely done piece.
Thanks,
:)
AutaB | November 12, 2009 - 22:16
Loved 'the reveal'!!! Really good :)
hellsbells11 | November 13, 2009 - 18:26
Many thanks to those who commented. I'm really glad you enjoyed the piece, it was fun to write.
I take on board completely what you about cliches Scout. It's just so hard to find the right words to express what you mean without them sometimes. Any ideas about what would have sounded better would be great.
Scout | November 16, 2009 - 13:37
I understand, but that's the challenge and fun of finding knew ways to replays those wonderful but oversued phrases I guess. It depends on the overall effects you are looking for, but in this case you could try the more unusual (e.g.: 'smooth as an eyeball' instead of 'silky smooth') or the more graphic (e.g.: 'vomit/bile inducing' instead of stomache churning'). However you do some of this anyway, e.g.: I really like the 'slimy tendrils of soft tissue' bit...
Hope that helps a little at least, no doubt my stuff is still peppered with the odd cliche, but I find that coming back to a piece that's been written very quickly a few days later helps, or reading aloud, and then anything that sounds remotely too 'easy' to write/read or too familiar may need revising...
Thanks,
:)
hellsbells11 | November 16, 2009 - 16:12
Oh, I love 'smooth as an eyeball'! Wish I'd thought of it.
Thanks for being so helpful and willing to share. I'm new to writing and am eager to learn.
Scout | November 16, 2009 - 22:58
Haha, no worries, I enjoy the discussions. Good luck with the rest of your writing, this seems to be a really useful and fun site so I'm sure we'll both continue to get lots out of it!:)
threeleafshamrock | November 26, 2009 - 11:31
Nice one, I was waiting for a twist but wasn't sure what it would be; enjoyed!
Oh, and welcome to ABC tales; I know you will enjoy it.
Chris ;)
hellsbells11 | November 26, 2009 - 13:27
Many thanks Chris. I'm having fun so far.