Please Mummy. .

Cherry

By Highhat

Sat, 17 Apr 2010
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21 comments
 

When the old woman speaks
she speaks of her fear.
Her fear of dying in the gutter.
She can't find her way home
so she doesn't go out.
She sits at home, freezing
and doesn't know why.
She has forgotten everything
but the moment
"You look like my daughter."she says to her daughter.
Her tea has grown cold because she forgot it.
She is a shell around her compassion.
Her soul is on paper and in everything she doesn't dare to touch.
She hasn't forgotten how to touch,
only who.

Certificate PG
Poem
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Comments

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
An extremely poignant poem; its point hammered home effectively with this line:- "You look like my daughter."she says to her daughter." Another strong line which brings this piece to its touching conclusion:- "Her soul is on paper and everything she doesn't dare to touch." A well-written piece with an effective narrative tone. Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
gee thanks and that is from you Tina who write so diligently and well.I appreciate your comment.

Submitted by shoe on
very strong writing Highhat, shot straight to my heart, then twisted the knife. I'd say I love it but it's almost too sad for that sentiment.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yes it is a bit sad shoe but thank you very much

Submitted by Silver Spun Sand on
So pleased to see this cherried. Made my day;-) Tina

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Oh Yeah Rock I was wondering about the forum topic comment ;) Glad you liked it. I wouldn't have chosen anyone but my Mum pia

Submitted by Foster on
Very, very good.

Submitted by lenchenelf on
Pared down and very effective atb Lena xx

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you Foster and Lena. Nice of you to comment- much appreciated. Good to know someone is reading your stuff and liking it ;-D pia xx

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, You certainly made a tear come into my eye, old age is such a sad thing, when you cannot remember, you summed it up so well. Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Jenny thanks for reading. My Mum died 29th December last year. The sorrow and pain still goes on. I miss her so much. She had her lackings but was a great Mum. I loved her very much. pia

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Pia, I feel for you so much, I can really understand how you feel, we seem to have a lot in common. I lost my mum in the August just before the two towers in New York got attacked by those planes. She commited suicide, she jumped out of the bathroom window. The worst part was, I hadn't seen her for 8 months, I did not even know there was anything wrong with her, nobody told me. I really don't know what I would have done without my partner. All I can say is, that you never forget, but time is a great healer, though I do find there are times, when I wish I could just speak to her again like we used to. Be strong pia, it's what your mum would have wanted for you. Love Jenny.

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Your poor old Mum. I think it is so sad when someone takes their own life when they are ageing. So sad. They have lived a long life and then it is all gone in an instant. I really feel with you. Must have been a shock. Yes no matter how old they get you miss the people you have lost. I think my mother died at a nice ripe old age and she left her suffering. She just couldn't remember very much and was jolted now and again when she suddenly remembered something and couldn't put 2 and 2 together. So sad. Well she is at peace now. It was such a lovely funeral with all her old friends and they are really old people and their speeches for her and my grandson was there too- he is only 2 years old. He is so sweet. I hardly ever see him otherwise so it was a day with mixed emotions. A few weeks later we spread her ashes in the sea and that was a touching ceremony- I read one of my poems while we were standing on the rocks by the sea. The sun was shining and it was windy but it was a truly wonderful way to say goodbye to her. But yes I miss her and wish that she never had had Alzeimers. My sister looked after her very well as I lived too far away. She was fantastic. But my mother could never really recognize her the last couple of years. Thanks for your feed back- terrific. cheers pia;)

Submitted by skinner_jennifer on
Hi Pia, I wish for you happiness, be strong, keep smiling. So will I. Jenny. xx

 

Submitted by Highhat on
Yeah the same to you dear person pia ;)

Submitted by danrama on
Simple, chilling and Real. Loved it Dan x

Submitted by Highhat on
Thanks Dan ;)Pia

Submitted by HOMER05 on
I thought this was so sad. It brought a lump to my throat. I think you did a good job on it. xx :)

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you very much Homer- yes it was very sad and my mother passed away just before New Year 2009-10. I wrote this after she died. She was 81 but not clear in her memory at all- wasn't good at looking after herself. I guess she died of old age though she was suffering. She was a wonderful woman and Mother. Thank you very much for reading this one and for your comment. ;)Pia

Submitted by jonahs cough on
this is really nice. every line is so deep in meaning and it is really touching to read. thanks.

Submitted by Highhat on
Thank you jonahs for your very kind comment ;)Pia