Please Mummy. .

An extremely poignant poem; its point hammered home effectively with this line:-

"You look like my daughter."she says to her daughter."

Another strong line which brings this piece to its touching conclusion:-

"Her soul is on paper and everything she doesn't dare to touch."

A well-written piece with an effective narrative tone.

Tina

gee thanks and that is from you Tina who write so diligently and well.I appreciate your comment.

very strong writing Highhat, shot straight to my heart, then twisted the knife. I'd say I love it but it's almost too sad for that sentiment.

Yes it is a bit sad shoe but thank you very much

So pleased to see this cherried. Made my day;-)

Tina

Oh Yeah Rock I was wondering about the forum topic comment ;) Glad you liked it. I wouldn't have chosen anyone but my Mum pia

Very, very good.

Pared down and very effective atb Lena xx

Thank you Foster and Lena. Nice of you to comment- much appreciated. Good to know someone is reading your stuff and liking it ;-D pia xx

Hi Pia,
You certainly made a tear come into my eye, old age
is such a sad thing, when you cannot remember, you
summed it up so well.
Jenny.

Jenny thanks for reading. My Mum died 29th December last year. The sorrow and pain still goes on. I miss her so much. She had her lackings but was a great Mum. I loved her very much.
pia

Pia,
I feel for you so much, I can really understand how
you feel, we seem to have a lot in common. I lost my
mum in the August just before the two towers in New
York got attacked by those planes. She commited
suicide, she jumped out of the bathroom window. The
worst part was, I hadn't seen her for 8 months, I did
not even know there was anything wrong with her,
nobody told me. I really don't know what I would have
done without my partner. All I can say is, that you
never forget, but time is a great healer, though I do
find there are times, when I wish I could just speak
to her again like we used to. Be strong pia, it's
what your mum would have wanted for you.
Love Jenny.

Your poor old Mum. I think it is so sad when someone takes their own life when they are ageing. So sad. They have lived a long life and then it is all gone in an instant. I really feel with you. Must have been a shock. Yes no matter how old they get you miss the people you have lost. I think my mother died at a nice ripe old age and she left her suffering. She just couldn't remember very much and was jolted now and again when she suddenly remembered something and couldn't put 2 and 2 together. So sad. Well she is at peace now. It was such a lovely funeral with all her old friends and they are really old people and their speeches for her and my grandson was there too- he is only 2 years old. He is so sweet. I hardly ever see him otherwise so it was a day with mixed emotions. A few weeks later we spread her ashes in the sea and that was a touching ceremony- I read one of my poems while we were standing on the rocks by the sea. The sun was shining and it was windy but it was a truly wonderful way to say goodbye to her. But yes I miss her and wish that she never had had Alzeimers. My sister looked after her very well as I lived too far away. She was fantastic. But my mother could never really recognize her the last couple of years.
Thanks for your feed back- terrific.
cheers
pia;)

Hi Pia,
I wish for you happiness, be strong, keep smiling.
So will I.
Jenny. xx

Yeah the same to you dear person
pia ;)

Simple, chilling and Real.
Loved it

Dan x

Thanks Dan
;)Pia

I thought this was so sad. It brought a lump to my throat. I think you did a good job on it. xx :)

Thank you very much Homer- yes it was very sad and my mother passed away just before New Year 2009-10. I wrote this after she died. She was 81 but not clear in her memory at all- wasn't good at looking after herself. I guess she died of old age though she was suffering. She was a wonderful woman and Mother. Thank you very much for reading this one and for your comment.
;)Pia

this is really nice. every line is so deep in meaning and it is really touching to read. thanks.

Thank you jonahs for your very kind comment
;)Pia