Everywhere, but no where.

You will probably find you get more feedback if you make some attempt to comment on others' work. The one word which struck me as I read this was 'nice': a word that you would be taught to avoid on a CW course, when being advised about how to critique. There is a facility with words and turns of phrase, I quite enjoyed 'feeling his hugs' etc. However, the sentiments and writing don't have any kind of 'wow, I wish I'd written that' or 'hmm... that's a new way of saying that'. It's just a 'nice' piece of writing. The other thing is, and no doubt you will disagree about the importance of this, what is it that your laughs 'dye'? You mean 'die', I suppose. The problem is that this error means the reader does not know what you mean by 'peek' later on. Do you mean 'look shyly out' peek or 'reach some height or extreme'peak? 'Nowhere' is one word You need 'threatening' vice 'threating' You probably don't need 'breeze of wind'; unless you have a stylistic reason for the tautology, use one or the other. No doubt the above will create much protest about 'Grammar Nazism', but, I think you will agree, it's important that what you write is what you think you are writing. Keep on writing Ewan.