And yet… (10th June 2009, 10.09am)
you’ve gone dark, absolved any
guilt in radio blackness, blocking
the airwaves with apathy.
I was content with nothing;
spider-like, I’d lost my taste for flies,
tangled in my web of solitude,
comforted by the acquiescence
of silence inside my simple room.
Reacting to a lack of passion;
I came, thinking you were safe…
mistakes can so rarely be unmade.
I was naïve as usual,
caught in the ease between us,
twisted tight inside time spent,
captured by the kinship in your eyes,
ignorant of your intent.
Some laugh, call it instinctive;
others rightly mark the betrayal,
labelling me ‘foolish girl’.
I was hoping for counsel;
your gifts were more than ears, eyes, heart;
instead you offered masculine charms
and, for a moment, I overlooked
your shattered past with my reaching arms,
and yet…
Jennifer Pickup
Comments
sunshine | June 10, 2009 - 11:52
Nice to see a poem from you again - I particularly like the way this hangs in the air at the end, and the last stanza. Margot
threeleafshamrock | June 10, 2009 - 12:41
Back in the poetry mode with a bang Jen. Very good and nice to see it ;)
Chris XX
MistakenMagic | June 10, 2009 - 15:03
Great to have you back in the poetry saddle Jen ;) This is beautiful, love these lines;
'I was hoping for counsel;
your gifts were more than ears, eyes, heart;
instead you offered masculine charms'
and brilliant suspense with the ending!
Magic xxx
jennifer | June 10, 2009 - 22:08
Thank you, guys, for your lovely comments! Yes - have finally finished Unbelievable, revving myself up for the edit, and this one slipped out today! Apparently, I can't write poetry and prose at the same time!
J x
Dynamaso | June 11, 2009 - 01:20
Really like this a lot, particularly the second stanza. Pleased to hear you've finished the first draft. Hope the editing process doesn't bore you like it bores me.
Like you, I find it hard to write poetry when I'm working on prose, as I am at the moment.
threeleafshamrock | June 11, 2009 - 10:29
Any chance of the next chapter of your book Jen...pretty PLEASEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
Chris XX
jennifer | June 11, 2009 - 12:03
Hi Chris,
Will try and post it up tonight!
J x
Nathan Bednarek | June 15, 2009 - 20:09
Phew, go Jen!
Now this is a poem I really enjoyed reading. Not only did I learn a new word, 'acquiescence', but I also gained a moment of complete tranquillity as I read this poem. The imagery, tone and the structure of this poem is just brilliant. A well deserved cherry!
Thank you for posting this!
Nathan xox