Autumn Grieves
(13th October 2008, 11.25am, 14th October 2008, 2.29pm)
The trees, as one, drop their leaves
in horror at the cold that creeps
up trunks and branches, shuddering
their finery into rags that disintegrate
like so many distressed damsels;
they whisper into the river, that
gently moving mirror, calm before
the winter floods stir mud into froth.
A slow wind raises a grumbling; as if
shedding is painful, somehow; wilting
skins decorate the stern and begin to
rot to blackness. I must sweep, clear,
clean before the leaf-mould settles and
the rust sets in, but when to begin?
They will keep on coming, the trees
reluctant to be naked all at once.
I can hear the rain fall like the sound
of applause on the mirror’s flat, grey
surface; a tarmaccaddam road that
winds, leading the way to Oz, but
I have lost my red shoes; they rubbed
my feet that night in Bath, all night
dancing to foreign beats, and the sores
lived on past the tiredness and snores.
The rain has ceased. Wind sleeps.
I sweep the pontoon, disturbing the
sleeping ducks, apologise with bready
offerings. The dog is jealous, leaps and
barks, launches the fluttering wings;
Francis Drake the heaviest, plunging like
a drunkard, skittering, settling, wary;
the swans just hiss, necks raised.

Comments
MistakenMagic | October 14, 2008 - 14:56
I loved this Jennfier! The imagery is superlative and truly awakens the senses. I would pick my favourite lines but there are too many of them! An overall excellent piece ;)
Silver Spun Sand | October 14, 2008 - 17:49
I agree with Magic's every word. Another little gem, Jennifer. I do so love your writing.
"I can hear the rain fall like the sound
of applause on the mirror’s flat, grey
surface; a tarmaccaddam road that
winds, leading the way to Oz ..."
My favourite lines.
Tina
jennifer | October 15, 2008 - 08:35
Thank you, girls, I think I have managed to capture the day and the feeling here; I always feel melancholy when the leaves start falling. Winter is not my season!
anipani | October 15, 2008 - 13:01
Nor mine, but what a wonderful evocation. Loved this,love the red shoes, such a powerful image of longing, desire, and the promise life holds. Fantastic. And of course they rubbed. C'est la vie1
DavidK | October 16, 2008 - 11:27
Great poem...one point, did you deliberately extend 'tarmacadam' to 'tarmaccaddam'?
DavidK | October 16, 2008 - 11:29
Great poem - one point, did you deliberately extend 'tarmacadam' to 'tarmaccaddam'?
jennifer | October 16, 2008 - 12:35
I've always spelt it that way. It seemed to make sense phonetically. But a wonderfully sarcastic way to point out a spelling error! Love it!
jennifer | October 17, 2008 - 19:11
Yey! My first ever Poem of the Week!
Very chuffed - a very personal poem, thank you ABCTales!
J x