Keeping up Appearances (Inspiration Point) (25th January, 2009, 4.52pm)
Here we go again, hand in hand with
pain, part of our eternal threesome;
watch us sit and dine in perfect time,
with a syncronicity that belies the
truth of us, the rules of being human
emblazoned on our minds; keeping up
appearances. In the mirror, I watched
you watch me dress, the appreciation
tainted with distress; to want to touch,
yet unable to reach across the room.
The dark cocoon of the car enveloped us
with its resentful silence. Later, we will
not make love, simply have sex, clock-
work automatons, versed in the familiar;
you will make me come; an obligation.
Laughter and light surrounds; I abound
with the freedom of conversation with
strangers who do not know my business.
And you, observant, spider-like, to my fly,
wrapping me tight inside your web of lies,
a possessive hand about my waist as we
raise our brandy glasses. Here we reign,
me in my red dress, you in your James
Bond suit, irresistibly formal, the change
between us absolute; we are strangers.
Jennifer Pickup
Comments
tamara (not verified) | January 25, 2009 - 17:01
This is one of the best poems I have read for a long time.
The way in which you have captured the emotions here is chillingly brilliant as it is a portrait of reality.
The way in which you have incorporated the I.P.Is so subtle and seductively smooth,it fits so naturally,infact my favourite lines also.
'And you,observant,spiderlike to my fly,
wrapping me tight inside your web of lies.'
Brilliant.x
threeleafshamrock | January 25, 2009 - 20:49
This is top stuff. Not a thing out of place and once you start reading, you just have to finish and read again. I agree with Lynne, this is the best I have read for a while. Terrific; well done.
Chris X
Doeslittle | January 25, 2009 - 22:04
I wonder why red dresses leads us down this road. Mine is darker than this, I think, though yours conveys a sadness well. I'm slightly worried about myself!
threeleafshamrock | January 27, 2009 - 14:22
Keep coming back to this piece. Why no cherry yet? Absolute CLASS!
Chris X
jennifer | January 28, 2009 - 16:58
Thank you, Chris, you have made one appear as if by magic!
Doeslittle - see 'Bound' - today's offering!
J x
threeleafshamrock | January 28, 2009 - 18:19
YEAAAA. A cherry! Well deserved...now, I want to see it in print, in a collection somewhere. Wonder if it will work again? ;)
Chris XX
jennifer | January 29, 2009 - 11:44
One can but dream! Maybe one day I will find the courage to have a go at either entering competitions outside of ABC or being published!
J x
shoebox | February 1, 2009 - 04:17
One day nothing! Don't hesitate, act now. :)