The fiercest new day

The air in his alphabet room was cool,
felt even more so because she knew the
day would pant into afternoon and sweat
into evening, dampening the night
so she dreamt of rain or leaky taps and
her breasts ached and dribbled. Crossing to the

sun lined curtains, prolonged the delicious
delight of his new day smile. She wondered
if this euphoria would fade over time
or just get bigger and stronger like him;
baby-gros that once hung from his toes, now
washed and tucked away for the next one. The

sun x-rayed her fingers as she tied the
yellow bows, and smoothed happy ducks into
the folds. Anticipating a sing song
coo, she turned and rested the heel of her
hands on the end of his hand-painted cot
and smiled at a glimpse of his tufted hair,
dark like hers, til’ her-

-arms ached for his weight,
and her lips for his morning taste of damp
talcum powder and sweet posits of her
milk, dried in the folds of his wrinkled neck.

Stillness, a stillness that she had never
noticed before, sagged like wet washing
over
his barreled body. She pulled back the
cover
impatient for his vital cycling
energy to let down her milky love.
Alabaster white -

- Alabaster mite,
frozen in milky stone, smooth and spotless,
lifted and pressed into her, she felt the
statue coldness seep into her breasts. Her
moan pierced the frigid silence and fractured
The fiercest new day.

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Comments

Highhat | October 29, 2010 - 20:50

this is beautiful and I know , being a mother who has breast fed her sons. They are grown up now and I am a grandma. Well done.
;)Pia

skinner_jennifer | October 29, 2010 - 22:25

Hi Juliet OC,
such a beautiful poem of motherhood, really enjoyed.
Jenny.

kim.rooney | October 29, 2010 - 23:53

Hi Juliet OC I loved the roll of the poem fed by lines such as:
she knew the
day would pant into afternoon and sweat
into evening.

Juliet OC | October 30, 2010 - 08:34

thank you. It was an old one, I reworked. I appreciate the comments.

Juliet

shoe | October 31, 2010 - 12:21

I liked these lines especially,

"she knew the
day would pant into afternoon and sweat
into evening, dampening the night
so she dreamt of rain or leaky taps"

A bit chilling too.

Juliet OC | November 1, 2010 - 15:59

thank you shoe - and yes it is supposed to be chilling. Juliet

Juliet OC | November 1, 2010 - 17:33

and thank you for the cherry. Juliet

Silver Spun Sand | November 2, 2010 - 14:11

Missed this one, Juliet;-) Till now that is.

You are quite the poet, and no mistake. More, please;-)

Very well done on the cherry.

Tina

pikeruk | November 20, 2010 - 20:08

Whilst I agree this is a well written piece, may I inject some comment to be taken or ignored.

" Crossing to the

sun lined curtains, prolonged the delicious..."

The gap between the end of one sentence and the beginning of another when it is a continuence of a sentence, which you do several times, makes the reading of it awkward? My advice would be to get rid of the gaps.

regards
pikerUK