I swam across the sea,
I sailed through the stars,
I battled with the raging winds,
To hold on to what was ours.
The sun scorching my neck,
The ice numbing my toes,
The glare stinging my eyes,
And you don't even know.
My fingers slipping slowly,
Losing everything,
Fumbling in the growing dark,
And it's you I'm blaming.
Comments
Beeme | August 31, 2009 - 17:35
I enjoyed this, the last lines worked perfectly and I'm sure lots of people can relate to feeling like this.
My favourite verse,
'The sun scorching my neck,
The ice numbing my toes,
The glare stinging my eyes,
And you don't even know...'
Beeme xx
Lacey | August 31, 2009 - 17:40
Thank you. This is the first thing I've written in a while and I literally just sat down and it came spilling out. All comments welcome. xx
russiandoll | August 31, 2009 - 20:09
The lines 'to hold onto what was ours' and 'and you don't even know' are just perfectly placed - I really like this piece. Well done.