After Dinner Mint

Posted by lenchenelf on January 29, 2009 - 17:50
from the ABC set Doodles

Minutes seemed like hours
When we were on a date,
We’d settle down to dinner
You’d push it round the plate.

Conversations, stilted,
Silences grew long,
Inspiration wilted
Like a jaded song.

If love is worth the striving for
In all we say and do,
Why did it feel like tooth extraction
When I tried loving you?

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Comments

not a bad "doodle", the feeling is raw and I like the rhyme, sadly now rather out of fashion...
Yutka:)

Thanks Yutka, it was scribed after ovehearing my daughters comparing notes, post date, in their late teens....such simple honesty :-) atb L :-)

It is brilliant,really enjoyed reading it.

Thank you Tamara :-)

'We’d settle down to dinner
You’d push it round the plate.'

This is brilliant imagery and the poem, although short, is packed with layers of emotions and meaning. A very enjoyable read, well done.

Nathan.

Len, I think we have a similar sense of humour. Love it ;)

Chris

Thanks Nathan & Chris, glad it brought a smile :-)
L

Ouch!

J x