I could recite, hateyouhateyouhateyou
in monotone; a strange, black, funereal
barge of words, bolted together for their
journey. Corroded hull creaks a rolling
rhythm, loose bound rage. But,
don't and sink without a trace.
I could recite, hateyouhateyouhateyou
in monotone; a strange, black, funereal
barge of words, bolted together for their
journey. Corroded hull creaks a rolling
rhythm, loose bound rage. But,
don't and sink without a trace.
Comments
Silver Spun Sand | April 14, 2010 - 09:57
As usual lena, you pack a punch with very few, excellently chosen words.
Like it;-)
Tina
lenchenelf | April 15, 2010 - 13:17
Thanks Tina, just a bit of silly :-)
small edit today. All the best Lena x
insertponceyfre... | April 15, 2010 - 16:39
I love the idea of a barge of words Lena
Silver Spun Sand | April 15, 2010 - 21:06
So do I;-) Wish I could do the same with a 'bit of silly'.
lenchenelf | April 15, 2010 - 21:22
Thank you Insert, it just struck me as a fitting image for a stream of invective on a man made route :-) :-) xx
Tina, you are so generous, thank you once again xx
Silver Spun Sand | April 16, 2010 - 11:37
Just popped back to say congrats on the more than deserved cherry...even for a bit of silly;-)
Tina xx
MistakenMagic | April 16, 2010 - 16:28
'I could recite, hateyouhateyouhateyou
in monotone; a strange, black, funereal
barge of words'
- wow, really love the phrasing of those first few lines! Well done on the cherry! :)
Magic xxx
lenchenelf | April 16, 2010 - 19:55
Thank you for your warm thoughts Tina and Magic, they are very much appreciated, atb Lena xxxx