Bus


from the ABC set Speedwrites

Bus

Quiet women and timid men, hugging
the relative comfort of chairs, eyes averted from shared smells,
their faces at odds; noses and mouths in a curled disapproval,
looking elsewhere.

A man has been knifed. Sliced behind the ear by a boy
who didn't think about the catch-up-crush on the stairs.
One of them is caught, bear hugged down by a drip-red,
blue collared, cut-up man.

He sat him on his lap like a squirming babe.
I didn't see the slice. I usually ride up front
peering through the reflection at the icy road:
I count scarves, hats, gloves and hoods.

I turned to see the action, and he cut
the condensation with something:
'Why don't any of you do anything?
Are you going to sit and give this world to them?'

Slowly, there became a less reluctant us;
'I called the police,' she said; he said, 'Stop the bus.'

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Comments

littleditty | December 19, 2007 - 18:53

first line ends on ´hugging´

had to put the ´the´ up there on the first line, as the space on the 2nd line is not long enough for it -why is this? How much space to prose writers get for their 2nd line? have i been greedy? Or is there a way to make the fonts smaller? Its a mystery....:)

littleditty | December 19, 2007 - 18:57

tcook | December 20, 2007 - 11:35

It can be as long as you like - the problem must be in the word format that you copied and pasted from!

anipani | December 20, 2007 - 14:58

hooked me in, kept me there, good tale well writ.

littleditty | December 21, 2007 - 13:09

yay! done it! thanks both...

Ewan | December 28, 2007 - 07:43

This poem pushes all my buttons: it's clever, has a nice couplet to resolve an ending and it's about something important to people. There's an almost cinematic or photographic feel about it: I mean the picture in my mind's eye is superreal.

Very well done.