August rain, middle
season, mixed up
sky of weather
dampest drizzle
of chilled wet air
beating autumn time
with dullest
pitter patter
two four, four four
in slowest largo tempo.
But it's much too early
autumn you are premature
we are not ready
for hats, boots, macs
and cardigans,
where was our
August summer time
of stripey deckchairs
marigolds, pansies
colourful parasols
lemonade and
ice lollies.
August rain, middle
season, mixed up
sky of weather
how I wish
we weren't stuck with you.
Comments
Highhat | August 19, 2010 - 18:54
I am in total agreement. You may be in England but I am stuck with this in Denmark. We have had sooo much rain this August that it breaks all records and that is according to the Met!
Nice piece by the way
Louise178 | August 19, 2010 - 19:02
Well I suppose it's ok, bit weak and wet! bit corny! I was feeling in a wet miserable mood! :) Thanks for your comment.
Highhat | August 19, 2010 - 19:12
maybe one is weightless in water but you don't have to think your poem was weak- it was a moments atmosphere. I thought it was expressionist. There, hope that makes you feel better ;)
Louise178 | August 19, 2010 - 19:19
Thanks Highhat you are kind, not sure you are telling the truth though, love your comment though it's better than my poem!
MistakenMagic | August 20, 2010 - 10:58
'largo tempo' - such a lovely image, Louise! And I completely agree with the poem's sentiments ;)
Magic xxx
Louise178 | August 20, 2010 - 12:06
Well I never, I have a cherry! Do you think it is a mistake? They meant to put it on someone else's? Thank you if it is correct. Thanks for you comment magic x
Highhat | August 20, 2010 - 16:33
Well done Louise. Good start. Congratualtions ;)
Louise178 | August 20, 2010 - 17:35
Thank you :)
kuno-chan | August 30, 2010 - 07:19
are you sure you aren't in utah. cuz that is how it feels out here too.
----Kuno-Chan----
Louise178 | August 30, 2010 - 12:46
No I am in the UK :)