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The winner

Posted by Louise178 on December 19, 2010 - 19:56
from the ABC set Poems

The year didn't stop
it carried on
didn't care
it trundled on
hurried past
and started again
didn't give me a chance
to say hold on
wait, stop, I need to think
relentless, it was eager, hungry
it multiplied, added once
again and again
again and again
again and again
and again I desperately clung
one step behind
as it raced on
I quickened my step
but to no avail
what a game
it has played
too quick for me
and now I am gone.

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Comments

Beeme | December 19, 2010 - 22:04

I really enjoyed, I really like the repetition!

Beeme xx

Louise178 | December 20, 2010 - 09:39

Thank you Beeme and thank you ABC for my cherry :)

rpatel | December 22, 2010 - 23:19

I loved the repetition too! The short lines worked really well and contributed to the structure and effect of the poem!