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Winter Scene

Posted by Luly Whisper on December 4, 2009 - 18:47
from the ABC set Not far from home

Fawn feathered reeds in clumps that stand
Upright in steel-grey frozen pond
And empty footprints in the snow.

A boy, a tawny trotting hound.
Cawing of rooks, excited bark -
Late afternoon in Eastfield Park.

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Frances Macaula... | January 13, 2010 - 02:02

Although I like this, it feels unfinished and like the initial notations of a very promising longer poem. Extend the view, tell us more about the park and the winter... take us on the journey, don't just plonk us there. I look forward to the result :o))