He Loves Me... He Loves Me Not...

Cherry

By mariaduffy

Sat, 06 Jun 2009
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12 comments
 

He loves me not...

Wordless whispers through the trees
Softest grass beneath my knees
Buttercup decide my fate
Hoping that it’s not too late.

He loves me...

Losing him I cannot bear
Love and laughter that we shared
Precious memories of you
Need to know you love me too

He loves me not...

Sadness I just can’t abide
Down here by the riverside
Where we one time sealed our love
Melded both like hand to glove.

He loves me...

Outcome I just can’t ignore
One petal left – there is no more
Swore we’d never be apart
Life is crushed – my broken heart.

He loves me not...

Certificate U
Romance

Comments

Submitted by Ewan on
I really liked this. Can you do the 'loves me,loves me not' thing with the petals of a buttercup? Are there enough? It's normally with a daisy, isn't it? It seems there are enough. Five generally. (Another verse? No, it would be a happy ending then:-))

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Submitted by mariaduffy on
THank you so much Ewan. I've just logged in so it's a lovely surprise to see I've been cherry picked. I've only been on this site since last week so I'm not even sure what it means. I guess it's good though! I did take a bit of poetic licence with the buttercup. I think as children, we used to pluck the petals from a daisy and put a buttercup under our necks to see if the light reflected. I much preferred the word 'buttercup'for this poem. Thanks for your comments. Maria

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Submitted by Jupiter on
Hi Maria. Another cleverly crafted piece. Loving your work. Congratulations on the cherry.

Submitted by mariaduffy on
Hi Jupiter. Thanks again for your lovely comments and compliments. I've just seen it's been cherry picked so I'm delighted. Maria

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Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Lovely maria, great idea and just enough petals ;) With a name like Duffy there must be some Irish in you, which of course explains the quality of your work ;) Well done on the cherry; well deserved! Chris ;)

Submitted by mariaduffy on
Hi Chris. THanks so much for the lovely comments. Yes, I am Irish (Dublin) and funnily enough, I was going to look you up. Somebody told me to check out your stuff. They said that you were Irish too and your stuff is great. I haven't had much time to read much from the site yet (four young children demanding of my time) but I'll get around to it soon. Where are you from? Maria

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Submitted by DraxB on
I too wondered about the buttercup, but liked this anyway, so it didn't seem to matter.

Submitted by mariaduffy on
Thanks DrazB. I'm glad you liked it, despite me taking a bit of poetic licence with the buttercup. Maria

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Submitted by rustyice on
I agree with Ewan perhaps one more verse.. but then again perhaps not that would change everything... the alternating love me - love me nots are brilliantly done

Submitted by mariaduffy on
Thanks so much rustyice. I'll take the comments on board and see if maybe it should be changed. Glad you liked it anyway. Maria

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Submitted by threeleafshamrock on
Hi Maria, living in Mayo near Belmullet (wifes'homeplace). Glad to know you and your work. Chris ;)

Submitted by Cavalcader on
new hi! maria duffy enjoyed the poem "He loves me loves me not." Memories when small taking each petal of park or school doing it, I think it was a Daisy but can do with any flower, and the Buttercup yes we always held under the chin, see who liked butter! reflection. well done cherry. Do you remember The Dandelions to? One O'clock, 2 O'clock 3 O'clock 4 memories julie