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Posted by queen beatle on October 8, 2008 - 15:58
from the ABC set my poems

The fog came
Slinking between the houses
Like a wolf among sheep.

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Nathan Bednarek | October 8, 2008 - 17:04

I really like this and the image of 'a wolf among sheep' is very well executed, even though the poem is very short, like a haiku. Good one.

Nathan.

littleditty | October 8, 2008 - 20:24

very Haiku - to make it a Haiku might make another nice version of your atmospheric poem - 5/7/5 syllables per line, with a Nature theme usually - here - just as an example:

The fog misting in
Slinking between the houses
A wolf among sheep

jennifer | October 9, 2008 - 10:59

Yes, haiku it!

queen beatle | October 12, 2008 - 12:05

I'll try my best. Good haiku!

queen beatle | October 12, 2008 - 12:07

Thanks. It was originally meant to be a haiku, but I got stuck. I'll try again.

queen beatle | October 12, 2008 - 12:08

I'll do my best!

alice sunderland | November 30, 2011 - 14:07

this is lovley. i dont think you should give a shit about it being a haiku or not.