I know that lady walking
the streets talking to herself
in a language of her own.
Her cat no longer carried in her
arms. The lucky thing had
someone to pat and scratch
its back; heard Minou passed on.
It was hard on Beth--now
talking to herself in lonesome
monologues, feet almost
racing across the sidewalk.
My wife and I share Hi’s
noticing she has an empty chip
bag in her hand. To collect
cigarette butts, she says
in answer to inquiring glances.
Got to do about this
Green thing, so I recycle
them; then she hurries away
to find a few more.
© Richard L. Provencher
Website: www.wsprog.com/rp/
Comments
Highhat | May 6, 2011 - 15:07
a bit of social realism Richard. Very good
;)Pia
maisie | May 6, 2011 - 16:26
)interesting! Might be improved by shortening sentences..
I know that lady walking
the streets talking to herself
in a language of her own,(.)
H er cat no longer carried in her
arms, (.) (T) he lucky thing had
something like this.... have fun it's your decision...
good job! (as the kids american laptop used to say)
Richard L. Prov... | May 7, 2011 - 01:21
Thank you, Pia. "Social Realism" I like that. Beth is a real person, one of an army who walk daily, from one end of town to the other, and back again. Pray for these dear souls who seek a friend, someone to care. Richard LP
Richard L. Prov... | May 7, 2011 - 01:22
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Richard L. Prov... | May 7, 2011 - 01:24
Your comments, Maisie, are well appreciated. And I am mulling over some of your change-ideas in the shortening of sentences. All the best in your own writing. Richard LP
Richard L. Prov... | May 7, 2011 - 01:33
Maisie, how does this look? A better flow? Thanks again for your suggestions. Richard LP
Richard L. Prov... | May 7, 2011 - 01:46
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oldpesky | May 7, 2011 - 09:12
Hi Richard. I like this poem almost as much as I admire the way you are gving a voice to those who need our prayers. Great work all round.
Silver Spun Sand | May 7, 2011 - 10:33
Couldn't agree with oldpesky more, and more power to your pen, Richard;-)
Tina
RachelPatricia | May 7, 2011 - 15:03
Really enjoyed this, Richard - strikes several chords all at once :)
Richard L. Prov... | May 8, 2011 - 02:02
Thank you all---penandpaperdreams/Tina/Silver Spun Sand/Old Pesky. There are so many precious folks who appear to be on the fringes of instability, and so it seems from afar. My wife and I spoke for a long time today to a lady, who needed a bath desperately, yet who enthralled us with her overview of a Canadian election just completed. How much do we miss when we disregard such people due to our smelly-nice sensibilities? And to give these great human beings a voice through writing about them is such a joy. Richard LP ps. Nice to get the cherry.
Nathan Bednarek | May 9, 2011 - 21:12
A well deserved cherry. Wonderful. Much enjoyed.
Nathan.
Richard L. Prov... | May 9, 2011 - 23:51
Thank you so much, Nathan. Good to hear from you again. I hope you are compiling a book of your writings. Cheers from Richard and Esther. Visit our website, done for us by a friend: www.wsprog.com/rp/