The guitar and its ghosts


from the ABC set 200 words

‘This one will wake the dead,’ the shopkeeper whispered. The guitar sat on its stand, alone in the red carpeted inner sanctum. Six strings shone out against a jet-black body and I’m sure its chord was in my head already – the one that I knew had to be played.

It cost a small fortune but I couldn’t have done anything else. I carried it carefully up the hill under the stars. My left hand was in position, the fingers resting lightly behind the frets. Taking the plectrum, I said a short prayer, and brought it gently down across the strings.

At first I thought nothing would happen. But then the notes took on their own life and I could feel them resonating, as the ground opened before me to reveal the gaping chasm of Sheol below.

As the shades crawled out, I searched each weary face. Half the night seemed to have passed before I saw you. I know it was selfish to have disturbed your rest but I just had to say goodbye properly and how much I miss you. I think you understood.

The second chord closed the portal and I was left with the early morning birdsong.

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Comments

insertponceyfre... | January 19, 2010 - 05:29

I've just read most of your stories - not sure why I didn't before. 200 words is nothing! - I'm so impressed with what you made from them

rjnewlyn | January 19, 2010 - 12:59

Thanks very much indeed 'insert...' It's really good to have the encouragement. Currently seeing what can be mined from this format - it seems an interesting thing to try out. But hard work...
Rob

Silver Spun Sand | January 21, 2010 - 00:13

A captivating piece of flash, which I would personally term (for what it is worth) a well-crafted piece of poetic prose.

And yes, I can personally identify with the bit about the hard work. Less is more, so they say, but it's a real challenge; and in this case, well risen to.

Tina

rjnewlyn | January 24, 2010 - 02:00

Thanks Tina - that's very kind. Yes, I've never liked the 'flash' term. Makes it sound too easy.