The Locket


from the ABC set 200 words

I found it in an old junk shop tucked behind a pile of books. The shopkeeper tried to warn me but I didn’t listen; I’d opened it by then and seen her face inside.

I kept it hidden; I didn’t want my family to pry. Then one day I was alone and she appeared right in front of me. I called out, but all she did was smile sadly and float through the wall.

I stopped eating properly around then. When the children asked to play I just stared blankly back. Eventually my wife left with them which was a relief really – I could keep it open all the time now.

She only returned once – it was when I’d made up my mind to unite myself with her and had a knife pressed against my throat. I think I would have gone through with it but suddenly she was there again, pale and sad and utterly lovely, but shaking her head, her cold hand on the blade.

So now I’m looking into the gorge, the locket somewhere in the churning waters below. I’ve lost everything but at least I’m free. There’s a blue sky overhead and the larks are singing.

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Comments

Silver Spun Sand | December 2, 2009 - 11:26

Interesting, this one,rj. Kept me guessing and I didn't twig...until the last paragraph.

Tina

rjnewlyn | December 3, 2009 - 22:59

Thanks very much for the encouragement

Rob

mmseason | January 31, 2010 - 21:11

Creepy, full of atmosphere (and how do you do that so concisely?) - can't see why this wasn't cherry-picked.

~ mand
The Travel Hopefully Blog

rjnewlyn | February 1, 2010 - 20:59

Thanks very much mand - very kind of you. Cherries come when they will and I've ceased to attempt to puzzle it out. But I recall feeling less comfortable about this one than some of my others and wasn't very surprised when nothing much happened. I'd like to revisit the idea at some point and see whether I can do it better.

mmseason | February 3, 2010 - 18:02

Perhaps it's the kernel of something longer.

~ mand
The Travel Hopefully Blog

rjnewlyn | February 6, 2010 - 00:25

Yes, maybe I'll have a go at longer pieces at some point. 200-word efforts seem the right thing at the moment although the current experiment is to see whether they can be made to work in a serialised format.