Eyes are like mirrors of the soul, it’s said.
But I prefer to think of them as windows,
As windows of antique tinted glass.
Not some sharp and clear transparency
But a hazy, opaque, half-seen or guessed-at truth,
Whose nature and beauty is graced by its imperfections.
The light that shines from you
Is a blue-grey radiance;
Not chilled, but softened by the refraction
Through the frosted screen you present.
The amber ring in your eyes
Is not a halo adorning a saint,
But neither is it the Mark of Cain.
It’s simply an inheritance from your ancestors,
And tells of who you are and whence you came.
Gazing into your eyes, I see the you, within,
Often brazenly challenging me,
But sometimes, cowering in the shadows.
That is when the me that resides in my eyes
Takes your hand and draws you forth,
Into the gold-rimmed, blue-grey light;
The light that we will always share.
Comments
Lem | August 10, 2010 - 11:31
In a word: Beautiful! The last stanza especially has a lovely poignancy. Well done indeed. :)
jennifer | August 10, 2010 - 13:55
Just superb imagery throughout, one of those 'slow burners', I really enjoyed the nuances of the poem, so calm, and yet so full of emotion.
J x
sappho | August 10, 2010 - 14:52
Oh, thank you so much Lem and Jennifer. My first real journey into free verse, The subject meant so much to me, I dared.
tcook | August 10, 2010 - 17:41
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jennifer | August 10, 2010 - 17:44
Well done, sappho! And if this is the result of your experiment, then please keep writing free verse, because you're rather good at it!
J x
sappho | August 10, 2010 - 20:59
Wow!
Pick of the day - I never dreamed of such a thing.
Thank you so much. So glad you all liked it. I don't know what else to say, so thank you again.
Sappho
simonbarget (not verified) | August 13, 2010 - 14:26
very very good
sappho | August 13, 2010 - 20:28
I can't quite believe it. Picked as poem of the week.
Thank you to all who read my poem. Especial thanks to those who commented.
I like the thought that I am a member of this group of aspiring writers. It is a very special sisterhood/brotherhood.
Love
Sappho
Cavalcaderl | August 14, 2010 - 17:05
New Sappho
Yes, I like the last stanza
That is when the me that resides
in my eyes
takes your hand and draws you forth,
into the gold-rimmed, blue-grey-light;
The light that we will always share.
Beautiful.
Well deserved cherry! and chosen for
Facebook and Twitter pick of the day.
Well done. Gold rimmed, reminds me of glasses
to see.
julie
sappho | August 15, 2010 - 21:46
Thank you, Julie, for your kind words. I'm glad you liked it.
JoseHdz | September 4, 2010 - 20:22
Wow..
especially liked the opening stanza..
speechless..
congrats..
:)
sappho | September 9, 2010 - 13:25
Thank you, Jose.
Praise from other poets is praise indeed.