I've been 'down and out'
'moneyed and down,' sort of
'down and weird'
and 'weirdly up'
Today, I was 'down and up'
which is in some ways worse
than 'up and up'
except that's oft dishonest
pretentious or corrupt
I walked past a white statue Buddha
surrounded by daffodils
(the same one a few times)
but I did that all before
with living monks in rural Thailand,
where I was also "down and up"
I spent some time in Sweden, Harnosand
I tell ya a mad wondrous land
where there were bright green hills
and libraries, and cold winds
That was "down and up"
when it wasn't up and out
or down and out
Let me tell you about
the abandoned rail-road tracks
where I walk downtown and back,
and was making my way through
dark blackberry forests
passing hobos, dogs and yuppies:
Passing by houses and yards
of various sorts
which are interesting
except I try to never look too long
in case someone's looking out their window
or lounging in their yard,
as I don't want to have a moment
of fear, communion or understanding
or anything
Because I'm seeking something
and dodgin the dragons of smashed glass
that strew the rails
which are like Buddhas
with their own muse and tales,
stained with gasoline and Kerouacian journeys...
But to me that's all like white buddhas
or birds of strange melodic song
mushrooms or LSD
or books about evolution or space
all very cool if they're new
or especially true for you:
Me, I'm just walking
on the rail-road tracks
getting home without getting hurt
having ideas
writing a poem
down and up

Comments
animan | March 24, 2010 - 11:03
I like this a lot - the play with phrases and images particularly. I think, though, you slightly over-egg the pudding at the end. I'd, personally, lose the last two verses - you've said it by then - the point doesn't need any reinforcing. Just a thought.
seannelson | March 24, 2010 - 13:44
Animan, I write poetry because I like the form, even though it's not profitable or always popular. A big part of what I like about it is its relative minimalism. At the same time, I'm a story-teller and a philosopher, etc.
In my view, every stanza in this poem serves a purpose: personal and/or artistic or, like the first one, just drawing the audience in. Part of the reason that's true is that my work isn't the product of a fertile imagination, but are usually real descriptions of my life and feelings.
I did polish the poem a little. I do appreciate your appreciation, but I'm a bit sensitive about that sort of thing.
friendly regards,
Sean
wandelaar | March 27, 2010 - 20:15
i just like the pictures,
greetings