19 and just off
an overdose of sleeping pills,
watching odd-ball comedies
slightly chubby and scantily clad
on a spartan sofa
in a white hotel
for the scrambled...
where a pen is a self-harm weapon
her spirits are good
and she talks with a tripping tongue
about painting and the guitar,
brushing back her blonde Helena curls
mania flashing in her laughing eyes
she has the dark gift
just starting life really
(dew glistening pink rosebud)
so many discoveries and choices
ahead of her...
she may become an artist,
a lover, a mother or all...
a con-woman or a saint
preserved in symphony or paint
or dead and forgotten
young in a truck-stop motel room
or old behind a picket fence
In the meantime,
we eat well, smoke cigarettes,
and do the strange, strained dance
of transient friendship
native to such institutional isles
Comments
RachelPatricia | October 3, 2011 - 12:19
This is brilliant, sean - you really brought her to life here, very much enjoyed :)
Rachel xx
insertponceyfre... | October 3, 2011 - 13:12
me too - a wonderful portrait, well done.
skinner_jennifer | October 3, 2011 - 13:45
Loved this sean, so many wonderful desciptions.
Thanks for sharing.
Jenny.
oldpesky | October 3, 2011 - 17:48
Another fine piece of poetry.
seannelson | October 3, 2011 - 23:55
Thank you all kindly. I've been suffering from writer's block/depression and it helps to have my work(however humble) appreciated. You'll notice I've made a couple changes that, in my eyes, make the poem stronger and less prosaic.
msiagirl | October 4, 2011 - 12:50
Great description, love the last stanza and the fullness of possibilities.
Highhat | October 4, 2011 - 13:06
Having experienced similiar issues I really liked this Sean- I'm so glad that you take to heart the troubles of others. Sorry to hear about your writer's block/depression- it was good you could write this then!
;)Pia
Blessing | October 4, 2011 - 17:02
You've encapsulated so many who are so misunderstood and branded. Quite a journey and quite an unblocking experience for a writer.
MaggieG | October 4, 2011 - 19:26
Beautifully written indeed :)
Prettyrose | October 9, 2011 - 00:49
Hi Sean :)
I really enjoyed this poem and easily readable.
Your a brilliant writer with a fun and exciting way of writing/memories.
keep writing
keep smiling :)