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Posted by shoe on November 27, 2009 - 10:54
from the ABC set You're O.K, I'm not O.K

"I'd rather not"
like refusing an unwanted invitation
As if you had not already
searched
every room
every dirty crevice
even the basement
where insecurities gather wild eyed and alert
in the dark

"I'd rather not"
What?
Know me?
Love me?
Hurt me?
As if you have not already
left me
silent words in my head
I'd rather not
lose you

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Comments

Beeme | November 29, 2009 - 18:38

This is really beautiful, I love the last lines and the questions.

Beeme xx

Scout | November 29, 2009 - 22:07

I like this, keeps making me wonder what exactly the repeated line is in response to and the precise relationship between that speaker and the poetic voice. And LOVE lines 7-9.
Thanks,
:)

shoe | November 30, 2009 - 10:23

Thank you Beeme, Your comments are most welcome, :-)

shoe | November 30, 2009 - 10:27

Thanks Scout,
Shall I explain or would you rather wonder?
I'm really pleased you like it and took time to comment, :-)

shoe | November 30, 2009 - 10:28

Thank you ABC for choosing my poem, It's always a pleasure when someone like what I have written,:-)

Firebird | November 30, 2009 - 22:30

I like this :)

shoe | December 1, 2009 - 09:53

Thank you very much,:-)

threeleafshamrock | December 13, 2009 - 20:43

Super, well thought out piece; loved it ;)

shoe | December 14, 2009 - 11:20

Thanks for reading, and for your encouraging comments, always reasurring to know I haven't written drivel and that someone else "gets" it.:-)