I know...

Posted by shoe on December 8, 2009 - 13:15
from the ABC set Ramblings of a poetaster

I know you are in love with him,
it's in the slowness of your smile
the distance in your eyes
the curve of your back
and frequency of sighs

I know you are thinking of him,
though I lack the nerve to ask
it's in the locks of brazen hair
falling, unchastised
from half forgotten clasps

I know you will go to him,
it's in your promises
and the scent of your neck
as you lean to kiss my cheek
and leave and not look back

I know you won't forget me,
it's in the letters that you send
but the empty spaces echo still
memories of a childhood
I never thought would end

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Comments

Another great poem, shoe. (Just a wee typo or two. Apart from the first "it's" the following three, need apostrophes).

My favourite stanza:-

"I know you are thinking of him,
though I lack the nerve to ask
it's in the locks of brazen hair
falling, unchastised
from half forgotten clasps"

Much enjoyed;-)

Tina

Thanks Tina, pleased you like, goodness, how did I miss those...will rectify! :-)

Shirley

This poem is captivating and beautiful,
a true masterpiece Shoe. Couldn't deserve a cherry more :)

Beeme xx

Thank you for compliment Beeme, so lovely of you to say, :-)

Thank you ABC, Glad you liked my poem,:-)

Another gem and well deserved cherry, super stuff ;)

Thanks for the compliment Mr Shamrock,Glad you like, :-)

Oh gosh, I know this feeling!!
Very well written, I like the half-happy ending; "I know you won't forget me"

Beautiful x

Thanks Sugarhorse, Lovely of you to say so!