Steps

Posted by shoe on January 28, 2010 - 11:45
from the ABC set They don't mean to, but they do

I stumbled along behind you,
Trying to fit my inadaquate feet
Into the imprints you made.

My whispers trailed behind us,
Thistledown appeals
That only the bees noticed.

Your diminutive doppelganger,
I played out your mannerisms
To empty seats and no applause.

Long strides can shorten,
Journeys circle and turn,
Fairy steps can last forever,
Giants sometimes look down.

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Comments

This is great! I really enjoyed it. Well done.

Nathan.

Love it :)

Thanks Nathan, happy that you like this!

Thanks Fierbird, it's a wierd little thing so I'm glad you like it,:~}

That first stanza is pure genius ;) And these lines:

'I played out your mannerisms
To empty seats and no applause.'

- brilliant!

Magic xxx

Thanks Magic, I thought this could be something you might like, you give me so much reassurance, so I'm particularly pleased you like this,:~D

this is great I love the combination of adulthood and childlike nostalgia. A beautiful poem!

Thank you.