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A Kind of Loving

Posted by Silver Spun Sand on August 31, 2011 - 12:09
from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

Scrubs the kitchen floor;
wonders where it went...
the passion that was theirs,
before. Even the brush
responds to the lino, yet,
she recalls she’s forgotten
what it’s like...victim,
as she is, of this midden,
and of these four walls,
shrinking in on her.

Wrings out a cloth – wipes
the oven door. Steel-eyed
nights stare blindly back
at her, as if she isn’t there
no more. In her customary
shower, rubs numb her
‘orange-peel’ thighs...
sagging tits; all the worse
for three kids too many.
Soap will wash away
the debris.

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Comments

skinner_jennifer | August 31, 2011 - 12:42

Hi Tina,

how so many married women will be able to relate
to this. When you've had children and worked hard
it kind of goes with the territory.

I know I could relate to it, except I only had one
child, but the rest, yes I could relate too.

Another great read.

Jenny.

Silver Spun Sand | August 31, 2011 - 18:01

Thanks, Jenny. Glad you got something from this;-)

Tina

Highhat | August 31, 2011 - 18:52

Not too good to be stuck in a rut like this woman but why regret having children just because your body looks aged..? I don't! Certainly not.
I think this may be a picture despite me not relating to it so much..

;)Pia

JoseHdz | August 31, 2011 - 22:39

WOW~! s p e e c h l e s s....

this is powerful..

so raw..

so realistic....

i admire your courage-- it is quite beautiful, and touching....

cheers,

jose hernandez diaz.

Silver Spun Sand | September 1, 2011 - 07:57

Hi there, Pia. Many thanks for reading and sharing your views. I couldn't agree more. But, unfortunately, many women would maybe not see things quite from that perspective.

Pleased you got something from it;-)

Tina

Silver Spun Sand | September 1, 2011 - 07:57

Thanks, Jose;-)

Tina

rjnewlyn | September 1, 2011 - 22:49

Gosh - very bleak. But excellent. Really powerful stuff. I liked the steel-eyed nights part.

Rob

Silver Spun Sand | September 2, 2011 - 11:10

Thanks, Rob...I think 'bleak' sums it up admirably. Pleased you enjoyed and good to hear from you;-)

Tina

RachelPatricia | September 2, 2011 - 11:53

This is brilliant, Tina. Very powerful indeed and as Jose says, very 'raw'. I wouldn't swap my wobbly bits for anything, though - they tell a story, map a life kind of thing, remind me of who I am and where I've come from. This is defintely one for the ladies, and this lady loved it - thank you :)

Rachel xx

Silver Spun Sand | September 2, 2011 - 12:07

Thank you, so very much Rachel...I'm with you, all the way;-)

Have a good weekend.

Tina xx