“Like the tattoo,” I say,
as we lay there...after.
Nice touch – the butterfly
perched on the letter ‘M’.
At least you won’t forget
who you are,” I add,
lighting up – post-shag style.
She doesn’t answer –
not straight away.
“Yours truly designed it.
Used to fancy myself
as an artist, would you believe?
Well – what’s a girl like me got
if not her dreams?
Actually saw the opera once...
in another life. Anyway,
the name kind of stuck.
You know how it is.
Never even knew
what I was really called –
or who spawned me.
In my line of trade,
permanency don’t exist.
With lodgings as they are –
just one suitcase allowed,
at least it stops the rain
mispronouncing my name...”
Comments
shoe | December 28, 2009 - 17:19
feels like watching a film in black and white,(or maybe french) I don't know why! excellent and original,:-}
Silver Spun Sand | December 28, 2009 - 17:22
Hey, shoe...many thanks for that.
Strange, I too had a similar image in my head when I wrote this one. Great minds, and all that;-)
Tina
Ewan | December 28, 2009 - 18:31
I like 'dialogue poems'and this is a good one, worth the reading for 'at least it stops the rain mispronouncing my name'. This does indeed create (a sepia-toned?) picture.
Permanency? My dictionary has this as archaic except for the secondary meaning of 'something permanent' rather than the state of being permanent.
Regards
Ewan
Silver Spun Sand | December 28, 2009 - 18:57
Hi there, Ewan;-)
Permanency. My lil' old dictionary, supposedly 'The Shorter Oxford English' which is actually two whopping great volumes which are very heavy...says:-
'(noun) (a) the quality of being permanent (b) an example of something permanent'. Doesn't mention it as being archaic, but seeing as the person who wrote this poem is ;-) I wouldn't be at all surprised.
And I think 'sepia-toned' suits the mood well. My thanks to you, Ewan.
Tina
iris | December 28, 2009 - 20:46
Poignant. If I smoked, I'd light one myself!
Silver Spun Sand | December 28, 2009 - 21:48
Like to say the same myself. Except I do...and so I did;-)
You obviously captured the 'nature of the beast', as they say and I am grateful for your inspired comment. Thank you, Iris ;-)
Tina
Beeme | December 30, 2009 - 10:53
I really enjoyed, another brilliant poem. Very atmospheric. Not much I can say that hasn't already been said (-;
Beeme xx
Silver Spun Sand | December 30, 2009 - 11:37
Beeme, thank you. And don't worry, you said it
all and more;-)
Tina
MistakenMagic | December 30, 2009 - 11:52
'at least it stops the rain
mispronouncing my name...'
- love the final two lines Tina! And this is a superb dialogue poem - you really get a feel for both speakers!
Magic xxx
Silver Spun Sand | December 30, 2009 - 12:43
Ta muchly, dear Magic. Glad you enjoyed;-)
Tina xxx