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She Always Did That...

Posted by Silver Spun Sand on December 29, 2009 - 23:51
from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

Fondled her mug of tea
like she was cupping
a bird in her hands;
Hollywood Pink –
her nails today.

She had such nice hands,
but such crap taste
in nail polish.

Now, she was tracing
the rim – round
and around her finger
went. Her eyes were red;
her mascara, smudged.

The rain, he suspected,
but he never asked.
She was glad.

She was always like this
after visiting her dad.

His mind was elsewhere;
about to pop the question
after five long years
engaged.

The words
on the tip of his tongue...
about to take
the plunge...

Then, he notices
her finger. Round
and around the rim
it goes, but this time
in the opposite direction.

She asks him
what he was about to say.

“Nothing,” he tells her...
“Except – how’s the old man?”

She always did that;
spoke with her hands.

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Comments

rjnewlyn | December 30, 2009 - 00:28

Hi Tina

I don't know how you manage to keep up the output but this is great - 'pregnant with meaning' would be one way of putting it.

Rob

Silver Spun Sand | December 30, 2009 - 07:48

Quite a way with words you have, Rob;-)

My thanks to you.

Tina

shoe | December 30, 2009 - 11:15

this is just lovely, especially the mascara and rain bit, the delicate balance of, shall I say, shall I not it, reminds me of the mushroom picking \ wedding proposal in Anna Karenina, :}

Silver Spun Sand | December 30, 2009 - 11:29

My thanks to you, shoe...and yes, it is extremely reminiscent of the mood in that particular scene, now you come to mention it;-) Nice one.

Tina

MistakenMagic | December 30, 2009 - 11:49

Tina, this has already become one of my all time favourites of yours!! I love it - the description is so meticulous and delicate! You make something that is so ordinary seem so special. Very well done on this one ;)

Magic xxx

Firebird | December 30, 2009 - 12:16

This is beautiful ,Tina. Exceptional. You write such lovely poetry :)

Silver Spun Sand | December 30, 2009 - 12:38

Hi there, Magic.

Chuffed you like it, Magic. Trust the studying is going well;-)

Tina xxx

Silver Spun Sand | December 30, 2009 - 12:39

Firebird, thank you. You don't do so bad yourself;-)

Tina