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The Woman in White

Posted by Silver Spun Sand on October 26, 2008 - 19:03
from the ABC set Silver Spun Sand Poems

They paid their last respects – laid tulips
on the freshly-dug grave of the vicar’s late wife.
He’d seemed to take it in his stride. Said God moved
in mysterious ways – asked one and all to say a prayer.
Just two months wed, she was struck down in her prime –
a thrombosis, they said. It was at Evensong they found him,
slumped across a pew. A photo of his new bride on the seat
beside him. In his cold hands’ lectern, a bible and tucked between
its pages, a slip of paper that read. ‘Lord, forgive me. Disrespect
unintended, but I don’t understand. It seems I’ve lost the plot …
Somewhere between, ‘Our Father who art in heaven’ and Amen.

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Comments

Nathan Bednarek | October 26, 2008 - 23:45

Another great piece Tina and I must say how impressed I am with the variety of structure and subject in your work. Writers often tend to stay within their 'safety-zone', but you love to experiment and that's why your work is always so unique and even though it's very experimental it's very carefully crafted, so it never loses its flow.

Beautiful piece, well done again.

Nathan.

MistakenMagic | October 27, 2008 - 09:45

'In his cold hands’ lectern' - this was a beautiful metaphor Tina and my favourite lines have to be the ending; ‘Lord, forgive me. Disrespect
unintended, but I don’t understand. It seems I’ve lost the plot …
Somewhere between, ‘Our Father who art in heaven’ and Amen.'
I truly moving piece :)

Magic xxx

Silver Spun Sand | October 27, 2008 - 14:56

Nathan - ta muchly. Variety is the spice of life, don't they say?;-)

Your positive thoughts much appreciated.

Tina:-)

Silver Spun Sand | October 27, 2008 - 14:58

Magic - thank you. This piece was a long time in the writing, with many varying titles. Think I'll stop fiddling with it, for the time being anyway:-)

Tina xxx

Bradene | October 28, 2008 - 14:24

This is a smashing poem Tina and I agree with Magic about those last few lines truely inspired weren't they. Love Val x

Silver Spun Sand | October 28, 2008 - 23:28

Val, my thanks to you for reading. Hope things are going OK;-)

Tina xx

QueenElf | October 29, 2008 - 22:39

Long time since I've been on here. Even longer since I read one of your pieces. Eveyone else seems to have said it all. Loved it.