Afghanistan

Very good; strong and angry viewpoint from the inside.
I like this one.

Chris ;)

I think this is a very honest and thought provoking poem, Smokejack. Like Chris said a strong and angry viewpoint from the inside. Well done. This is a very good poem, which I enjoyed a lot. I think the layout works really well. I look forward to reading more of your work :-)

I particularly enjoyed these parts;

'We are not soldiers in name alone
We are not made of steel
We are not pins on a military map
And the bullets are as real.'

'As the blood we lose.'

Beeme xx

'the world would be a better place if the parents had to eat the sprouts'

Thank you both for your very kind comments. Feedback good or bad is so valuable and it's very flattering to have positive comments.

Much appreciated.

SJ

my favourite part was

We drive tanks that stall
We have weapons of poor construction
And weep as colleagues fall

A long way from home

i just finished watching waltz with bashir...so this poem really struck a chord with me. About how soldiers are very vulnerable. My initial response was "no one made you choose to be a soldier", but then immediately I read "we are easy to recruit...a chance of a job with security" and understood. thanks for your insightful poem.
Karen