He wanted to make clear
His indifference to her
He left her a message wrapped in snow
“Reply if you wish; ignore if you wish”
He left a footprint in a box
Hidden in the shadow of her house
She carved question marks on all the trees
And wrote her name on all the leaves
She tried to understand
He was trying to forget
Comments
Dynamaso | May 10, 2009 - 23:45
A great little piece this, Sunshine. I really like it a lot. I particularly like:
"She carved question marks on all the trees,
And wrote her name on all the leaves"
Isn't it always the way - as soon as the man loses interest, the women wants to know him better.
sunshine | May 11, 2009 - 06:42
thanks Dynamaso. And we're so often left with questions unanswered. Margot
Nicola6 | May 11, 2009 - 14:17
Great writing - concise with an elegant poignancy.
sunshine | May 12, 2009 - 06:40
many thanks Nicola
sunshine | May 17, 2009 - 20:08
Thanks. Good to have something to aspire to - I'll keep my L plates on until I can match the quality of the quoted words!
davidazed | June 12, 2009 - 08:39
Excellent