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Girl With No Friends

Posted by Yazmin on October 1, 2008 - 15:23

Girl. Full stop. Five feet tall. Sitting on a concrete wall.
Who is she? What's her name? Why's she angry? Who's to blame?
They say her life is full of lies.
How d'you know?
Its in her eyes.
Girl. Full stop. Five feet tall. She's not sitting on the wall.
She had no life
She followed no trends.
But all she wanted was some friends.

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Comments

Nathan Bednarek | October 1, 2008 - 19:24

A very strong message Yazmin. The poem is quite simple, yet very punchy. Well done.

luigi_pagano | October 3, 2008 - 14:16

Nice, compact, poem which says a lot in few lines.
One small criticism: rather than 'whose to blame?' I believe it should be 'who's to blame?'

Amanda-Moo | December 16, 2008 - 06:51

This is very powerful... it reminds me a lot of real life. How something very sad could have been avoided if someone just got some attention.
I'm very glad I found this poem.

Good job.

Amanda.

Yazmin | February 23, 2009 - 19:41

Thank you all very much, Im glad you liked it
:)