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Reasons for Loving You

Posted by Yazmin on October 1, 2008 - 14:58

I love you cuz you always smile
I love you cuz you'll stay a while
I love you cuz you're always kind
I love you cuz you'll stay behind
I love you cuz you mend my heart
I love you cuz you're not too smart
I love you cuz you always care
I love you cuz you're always there
I love you cuz you live me too
But I love you mostly cuz your you! Xx

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Nathan Bednarek | October 1, 2008 - 19:15

This is a very sweet little poem. I love the repetition and the 'list' technique here.

Just remember not to write 'your' when you want to say 'you are'- it should be you're (lines 3, 6, 8 and 10).

Overall it's a very enjoyable read. Again, I want to applaud you on your use of rhythm. It's very balanced. ;-)

Nathan.

Yazmin | February 23, 2009 - 19:38

Thank you, Im really sorry bout making all of the mistakes, I will try and improve :)