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Posted by Yazmin on April 3, 2009 - 15:21
from the ABC set My True Self, No Lies

What is there to do, When there is nothing to be done?
What is there to lose, When there is nothing to be won?
What is there to say, When there is nothing to be said?
Who is there to lead, When there's nothing to be led?
What is there to kill, If there was nothing there to live?
What is there to take, If there is nothing there to give?
What is there to try for,
When no one will say well done?
I'd like some recognition
A small pat on the back.
Cuz I'm trying my hardest,
Even if I am in bottom set.

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Comments

tretchicovmanicova | April 4, 2009 - 07:15

what do i hear in the willow when no breeze blows? a piece that causes thought, i like such pieces.

you may wish to check line three, as there is a mispelled word. thank you, yazmin, for sharing your writing.

"there is naught so disobedient as an untrained mind."

Yazmin | April 9, 2009 - 15:27

Thank you very much for your help,
Im glad you liked it
Yaz

threeleafshamrock | May 31, 2009 - 14:46

Hi Yaz, I like this one. It seems a bit sad and a feeling hopelessness comes across, as no doubt you intended. I hope it's not autobiographical; anyway it's good, well done and keep writing.

Chris XX

Biggus | June 1, 2009 - 12:46

Sad but thought provoking.
A good read

Yazmin | June 22, 2009 - 18:20

Thank you guys
Sadly it is partly true, I just about am in bottom set in english ;) thanks for the Comments
Yaz