You're in the middle of my poem,
at the beginning , at the end,
turning my mind dizzy;
making fizzes with my feelings.
You're better than the lovers
you're better than the lovers
who finished without getting
to the end.
I'm squirming, blushing,
turning,
covered cushioned curtained;
not listening but living in the rhythms
you're beating, heating , beating
me with.
I'm squirming, blushing,
turning,
covered cushioned curtained;
not listening but living in the rhythms
you're beating, heating , beating
me with.
Squeezy pleasy, and
I’m melting under my skin,
breathing you in , breathing you,in
and out but mainly in and letting
the constrictions of my heart play
to you, play to you, your turning
me round , and down and inside
out, and I can’t stop listening
to your videotape, video
tape. Clever,You’re so clever
so bloody wonderful,always
and in all ways , so wonder-
wonderful.
Comments
Dendrite | February 14, 2009 - 21:31
This is wonderful, put me that poetry trance state, very sexy without being... Are the spaces before and missing spaces after the commas intentional? I'd encourage anything so it's not a correction suggestion, it does make a rhythm throughout.
at the beginning , at the end,
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breathing you in , breathing you,in
anipani | February 15, 2009 - 11:10
thanks Dendrite, I am very remiss at correcting space errors with commas, so most of that is laziness, though I did try to get across a sort of breathlessness, which is part of that 'sexy' thing going on when I listed to Radiohead. It's more like they make me naked, get to the core of what I feel , being human. I think it is awe inspiring how a piece of music, or a poem can do that. I love paintings, but rarely get the same rawness of reaction from them. Interesting.\iknow what you meant when you said sexy, but not pornographic. I think explicit sexy is anything but.. It's more sensual, than titillating. I hope.
Doeslittle | February 15, 2009 - 11:43
Very radiohead turn about it. I love radiohead - liked this a lot, very lyrical.
Kahdai | November 6, 2010 - 15:05
To me its like having a good stretch in a storm by the sea what an exciting poem :) K