Complete me

I cannot understand how you
stand so tall,
yet half of your heart drags along
the ground;

Wonderful.

new Beeme
A very good descriptive love poem,
The stanza I like;
There's no denying that,
I like to watch your Adams
apple rise up and fall
As battalions of words fight,
for no obvoius cause...
accept I like the sound of your voice.

Many a time when once a telephonists,
I have thought I love that voice,and
found out never goes much,with description
I might think!of the person you see.
Had to post comment again,pressed wrong key.
hope your well.
all the best
julie xxx

Thank you very much SundaysChild, I'm glad you enjoyed. It's really nice to hear from you! :)

Beeme xx

Thank you Julie, I'm really happy you enjoyed! I'm good thank you, I hope your well :)

Beeme xx

I think you expressed yourself very well, Beeme. As Julie says, "a good, descriptive love poem", with much poignancy as well.

Tina xx

Thank you Tina, this is an old poem I found. I'm really happy you enjoyed.

Beeme xx

Beeme Congratulations! And to Katie my heartfelt condolences. I read
in the Forum. How sad. Chin up! Nolan

Thank you Nolan :)

I really like this too beeme - the last stanza especially

you've got a couple of typos:

third stanza, line 6 - do you mean accept, or except? It could be either but I think it might be the latter

fourth stanza, line 8 - should be you're

Thanks Insert, changed the typos. I'm glad you enjoyed :)

Beeme xx

And in the first line - I think it should be understandS.

I do like this - but I think you need to work at it a little more if only to clarify some of the thoughts behind it.

Whenever I’d written something that really doesn't look Ok and I'm unable to fix it up I just chuck it into the wastepaper. It's amazing but when you start from scratch again it always comes out beautifully fluent, but it's a lot of work. Anything worthwhile takes a good deal of effort. As well as time.

Nolan &&

Thanks Tony, I've edited slightly and changed the typo in the first line. Hope its more clear now.

Beeme

Thanks for the advise Nolan. Much appreciated. :~]

I like it Beeme, even though its very sad K x

Sometimes it is better to start over, sometimes you can’t. What is this :~] story now? I'm getting new glasses tomorrow [oo]