Soon we will not notice the dark afternoons,
or how the sun is never here when we need her.
I twist my awkward limbs towards light,
but I want nothing more profoundly
than to forget that my skin seeks this nourishment.
If you’d only known how many nights I faded,
watched my mother search our ceilings for answers.
Knowing she didn’t know what more she could do,
so I sunk home each night and glowed from the light of my laptop
until I existed as a mismatch of words scribbled in a notebook.
Suddenly I understood the melancholy of boredom,
how we had survived for this long loving each other silently.
And when winter closed down our capacity to communicate,
we cupped our hands around candles and prayed for one other.
Because I’d been clinging to past shadows like breath until it all dissolved
and I couldn't see the shine in your eyes.
Comments
Leander42 | November 12, 2011 - 21:53
'winter closed down are capacity to communicate,' - I suspect you meant 'our ' capacity.
As for the rest - I wish I could have written it. I''m infernally jealous!
Beeme | November 12, 2011 - 22:01
Thank you Leander42, changed 'are' to 'our'. I'm very happy you enjoyed this one so much, your comment is so lovely :-)
Beeme xx
Highhat | November 13, 2011 - 18:21
Very atmospheric Beeme- a couple of typos and a missing comma !!All in all well done- I liked it..
;)Pia
Silver Spun Sand | November 13, 2011 - 18:52
Beautifully, and tenderly written, Beeme. (In the last but one line, I think you mean 'breath')
Well done on the more than deserved cherry;-)
Tina xx
Beeme | November 13, 2011 - 19:27
Aha thank you Pia, where is the missing comma lol? Thanks very much Tina. Cheers for the cherry eds.
Beeme xx
rjnewlyn | November 13, 2011 - 22:00
This is very good - intensely atmospheric and memorable imagery. One of your best I think. Cherry well-deserved.
Rob
Highhat | November 14, 2011 - 16:51
It's gone Beeme-just disappeared Poof into thin air..
can't find the space it should have been now.. sorry.. this is beautiful.. works well now...
;)Pia
Beeme | November 14, 2011 - 17:33
Thanks very much Rob and Highhat :)
Beeme xx
Cavalcaderl | November 14, 2011 - 19:46
new Beeme
Really enjoyed this poem
Especially the last stanza.
Cupped hands around candles
and all prayed for one and other
Because I'd been clinging to past shadows
like breath until it all dissolved
and I couldn't see the light in your eyes.
Lovely. Well desrved cherry!
julie x
Beeme | November 14, 2011 - 19:59
Thank you very much Julie.
Beeme xx
fatboy74 | November 18, 2011 - 23:12
I agree with all these fine people Beeme - one to come back to.:-)
Beeme | November 19, 2011 - 18:53
Thanks Fatboy :)
Beeme xx