Hope on a cold day

'At first there is a sort of negative condition,
as if some tie were loosened, and then the
absolute freedom quickly follows, when, however
the freedom ceases the change-back or relapse,
preceded only by a spell of warning silence.'
-Dracula

The sun shone so brightly.
The streaks of sunlight;
like a white flag of surrender
across the horizon.

The fog was thick
the trees shivered,
caped with dazzling frost.
Glimmering white,
and bright- warning me.

The sky, unnerved,
speed up the clouds;
sent them tumbling towards us,
desperate to conceal.

There were moments
that morning,
I believed in change.
Captivated by the
beauty around me.

But the relapse of
the sun, fading into grey;
made me aware.
Everything is fixed
by some transient string-
held in the air,
balanced by our care.
And my hands alone...
are not enough

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Comments

skinner_jennifer | December 8, 2010 - 12:09

Hi Beeme,

this poem is so beautifully worded, as in the words:-
There were moments
that morning, I believed in change.
Captivated by the
beauty around me.

That is how I saw this poem captivating.

Thanks for a great read.

Jenny.

Beeme | December 8, 2010 - 12:21

Thank you very much Jenny for reading and leaving me such a nice comment. I'm really happy you enjoyed :)

Beeme xx

shoe | December 9, 2010 - 09:38

I like the way it pivots with that fourth stanza and brings it all together, Beautiful imagery and I love the end.

Beeme | December 9, 2010 - 10:59

Thank you very much Shoe :)

Beeme xx

rjnewlyn | December 9, 2010 - 23:27

I liked the 'relapse of the sun' line particularly. Captures the sense of a moment passing.

Rob

Beeme | December 10, 2010 - 17:00

Thank you Rob... the poem grew from that line.

Beeme xx

Kahdai | December 13, 2010 - 15:34

Great ending Beeme :) ofcourse there is hope x K

Beeme | December 13, 2010 - 15:42

Thank you Kahdai :) xx