I've prayed for the end

Hi there, Beeme. I like this;-)

A tiny point. Stanza 3, last line, 'bare' needs to be 'bear'.

Like, very much, 'brought down stars/with nets/ of ambition. Personally, I would make 'with nets of ambition' all one line. I.e.

'brought down stars
with nets of ambition'

Seems to flow better that way, but, as always, it's up to you. It's your poem, after all;-)

The last stanza is the icing on the cake.

Tina xx

Yes I agree with Tina- the last stanza is the icing.
;)Pia

Thank you very much Tina, I feel more confident about this now:] Glad you enjoyed and liked the last stanza too.

Beeme xx

Thank you Pia! :)

Beeme xx

Excellent!

You say you feel 'more confident' when have you not been confident? Everything you've ever published on this site has always been 'cherry worthy' in my eyes.

'brought down stars
with nets of ambition'

Only you could create nets of ambition :D

X
Pinda

Thank you Nolan! :)

Beeme xx

Awwh thank you so much Pinda! I always feel unsure whenever I post but usually I'm reassured by the encouragement by others. Glad you enjoyed this :]

Beeme xx

This is very good Beeme, 'hunted the chase' brings to mind Yeats' Oisin and the wild hunt of legend. Whole poem has a mythical feel to it which works really well. :-)

Thanks very much Fatboy :] Glad you like this.

Beeme xx

Lovely imagery Beeme xx