Softly they fall,
gentle and silent
Petals of winter’s white rose,
Hard edges fade and blur
Trees shiver in frigid slumber
Quick-flick, warily she darts
Stop-start, stop-start
Eyes not seen but felt
Stop-start, stop-start
Fear falls with the black arrow
This way and that
Faster, faster
Heart hammering, legs pumping
Bloody demise descends
Talons outstretched… Then silence.
The dark stain of life’s harsh red rose.
Comments
tcook | July 27, 2010 - 17:52
Excellent use of the IP - good stuff!
Highhat | July 27, 2010 - 18:37
A very good IP poem "trees shiver in frigid slumber. . " nice line ;)xx
pia
skinner_jennifer | July 27, 2010 - 18:43
Congratulations on being Cherry Picked.
Well deserved.
Jenny.
darkenwolf | July 27, 2010 - 21:02
thanks for all your comments - very much appreciated. I decided that i'm going to do a poem, a short story and a novel idea based on the IP; can't promise that i'll post them all though. thanks again for the comments
Highhat | July 28, 2010 - 19:07
You do that. I think it is a good idea;)
pia
kheldar | July 29, 2010 - 01:11
Really clever piece, a great take on the IP. A well deserved cherry.
Kheldar :--)
Kahdai | July 31, 2010 - 12:42
great ip!
darkenwolf | July 31, 2010 - 13:02
ty :)
MistakenMagic | July 31, 2010 - 21:51
Really love the rhythm in this one, darkenwolf! Especially the repetition of 'stop-start'. Well done on the cherry ;)
Magic xxx
darkenwolf | July 31, 2010 - 22:37
high praise indeed Thank you very much :)
Sally H | August 1, 2010 - 18:55
great poem, and well deserved cherry!
keep it up :)
Sally H
darkenwolf | August 1, 2010 - 21:11
TY ;)
Cavalcaderl | August 3, 2010 - 21:11
New darkenwolf
Yes,I too say great use of the (IP)
Congrats: on being cherry! picked.
julie x
darkenwolf | August 4, 2010 - 07:17
many thanks - glad that you enjoyed it ;)
PipMic | September 12, 2010 - 16:58
brilliant...just read it ... also like the line - "trees shiver in frigid slumber"