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Posted by Dynamaso on May 25, 2011 - 05:22

I’m riddled;
with confusion,
with desire,
with tension,
with doubt,
with dissatisfaction,
with inaction,
with obsequious intention,
and with failure.

I’m barren;
without love,
without time,
without humour,
without guidance,
without gravity,
without light,
and without warmth.

This life,
this confusing biology,
doesn’t get any easier
despite the amount
of time I spend
trying to decipher it.
I’ve yet to find
the decryption key,
the one piece of information
to unlock the mystery.

I’m riddled.

I’m barren.

But don’t give it a second thought;
at least I’m still here.

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Comments

Highhat | May 25, 2011 - 05:50

I have a teenage son so I am very much on my toes as to how a teenager feels and it can be very difficult for them at times. I just loved this poem Dynamaso. I think you have captured quite a bit of the uncertainty they feel about the world and the feeling of responsibilty weighing so heavy on their beautiful shoulders.
Sorry for rambling

;)Pia

Dynamaso | May 25, 2011 - 06:15

Pia, thanks so much for your considered comment. Just so you know, I'm pretty mucht the opposite of this piece - an optimist by heart and nature. But I have a number of teenage nephews (and once was one myself, many years ago) so am in familiar territory.

And for future note, you're more than welcome to ramble away. I really don't mind :)

Mark

maisie | May 25, 2011 - 10:17

Admiration :
"this confusing biology,
doesn’t get any easier
despite the amount
of time I spend
trying to decipher it.
I’ve yet to find
the decryption key,
the one piece of information
to unlock the mystery."

very easy to understand & well put.

oldpesky | May 25, 2011 - 12:22

My own teenage son doesn't believe in stereotypes, but that's because he's become one. Hope you find that decryption key, and share it.

Dynamaso | May 25, 2011 - 12:52

Hey Maisie, thanks very much. It is very much a case of 'I wish I knew then what I know now'-ism, me thinks.

Dynamaso | May 25, 2011 - 12:53

Pesky, if I find the decryption key, I'll patent the bloody thing and make a fortune!

seashore | May 25, 2011 - 12:54

I particularly like the last four lines...nice ending.

Dynamaso | May 25, 2011 - 13:01

Thanks Seashore. Glad you think so.

SundaysChild | May 25, 2011 - 17:32

Great piece Dynamaso, much enjoyed.

Dynamaso | May 26, 2011 - 00:17

SC, thanks - glad you liked it.